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Hey anons, I've been working on a little game/story, not much to it, but basically it's about a brother taking care of his little sister for the weekend. It's a slow story, sexual progress doesn't come fast, it focuses on the corruption of the MC and the sister. 

NOTE: Loli and incest is disabled by default, press the "." after "Start Game" to enable it.
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>>8273 (OP)  In my genius, I forgot the game. Here it is, just rename it from ".swf" to ".html", and it will work.
Played a bit and seems nice, still playing it though. Will later point out anything that strikes me as worth pointing.
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>>8288
Thanks man. Any feedback is appreciated, be it good or bad.
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>>8290

So, content ends just after leaving the house on day 2, right? The writing is well done, it sets up a sensible and clear picture for the progression of events and all that. Also, good idea to add bad ends if the player goes too fast into things. Not the most helpful feedback I'm sure but honestly, I'm not a good writer and didn't spend a lot of time thinking about each line and thus, I can't provide said good feedback. I am certainly interested in seeing how this will go.
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>>8292
Hearing that it's not too slow/badly written is great feedback in itself to keep me motivated. Indeed, content ends there, but I am writing more right now. Can't promise any delivery schedule, since this is just a little hobby project that I do in my spare time.
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>>8293
The hardest scenes for me write were the masturbation scenes, and the (patch locked) rape scene. Hopefully I will improve on them as time goes on, but if anyone has feedback on them I'm interested.
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>>8294

One thing that annoys me to no end is how quick/rushed some games are. I understand they and the player wants to see erotic content but by god, can't we have some worldbuilding and meaningful character interaction before everything and everyone engages is hot, constant sex? That is possibly and very likely my inner autism guiding me but mah god, I'd be happy if given Mass Effect 1 but with more porn and even more plot.
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>>8296
Same, I always hate that. Why bother making an incest story, when the sister is cock-hungry from the start and there doesn't seem to be a taboo at all. 

But it's what people like in sex games, so I added disclaimers and bad ends to deliver on that somewhat. The 'canon' story will be slow though, and not rushed at all.
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>>8273 (OP) 
changelog v0.5.3:
- finished car drive scene
- finished changing room scene
- now 12533 words in story
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>>8303

Just finished reading it. My feedback? The dressing and showering scenes were really hot and - again, clear as day - it may seem counter intuitive but I feel it would work better for you and us (if anyone else is even here lmao) if you were to release only when more content was added. Don't rush things nor try to promise ETAs, write when you feel like it so that you put spirit into it without risking a burnout. 

Did I just throw the basic'est advice possible? Yeah, can't be sure people know the basics nowadays.
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>>8273 (OP) 
Don't have time to read this right now, but what exactly do you mean by corruption? Is it less about romance and more about pushing the sister into doing more and more sexual things?
Glad to hear that you plan on having things develop slowly though. I remember that Stuffed game that was posted on /hgg/ a few years ago, that went way too fast. Within the space of an evening the sister was begging for sex from her brother after being accidently fucked by her father and a dog, and afterwards none of them seemed particularly concerned by it. The lack of any weight to the events really killed the immersion.
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>>8310
Plan is to probably release the next update when I have about 4 more scenes, and after that the next update will be when day two is complete. I won't be able to keep pumping out content like this, but I have a weekend off right now, so dedicating it to writing for this game. Many of these scenes have been in my head for a long time, and I'm just writing them down. 

>>8319
Basically romance, plan is basically for first for the brother to get "corrupted" into feeling attracted to his sister. Then through various events, they grow closer and closer. So more corruption as in, their brother-sister relationship gets turned into more than that. Although the plan is for when the brother is fully "corrupted", for him to take a more active role in setting up scenarios to make the sister fall for him, since I believe that makes breaking the incest-taboo more realistic. And gives a bit more depth to the brother's character.
I think I might have fucked up my flash install
When I open it, all I get is a white screen
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>>8392
Change the .swf to .html they are just using the file name trick to attack the file as an 'image' to this imageboard.

Nice to see this again, I think I played a very early version as I recognize parts of the opening scene.
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>>8297
>Why bother making an incest story, when the sister is cock-hungry from the start and there doesn't seem to be a taboo at all.
>>8392
It's a twine/html game, but you can't attach .html files to this board, so I change the extension to .swf to bypass that.
>>8394
Yep. A few years ago, I made my first attempt to make this game, it was posted on ATF. Came back to it recently, codewise it's entirely redone, and most of the writing is as well (some early scenes are similar, but rewritten as well).

I'll probably post an update later today. Have written an extra 3000 words so far, intend to finish a few more scenes then upload it. Thanks everyone for your interest.
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>>8273 (OP) 
New version. Quite a bit of new text, 4k+ words. Changelog:
- make changes to earlier passages, 17415 words now
- add changing room masturbation scene
- add recreational swimming scene
- add swim practice scene

As always, the file extension is ".swf", it needs to be renamed to ".html" to actually play the game. Next update will be when day two is complete.
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>>8416

Olympic pool, day 2 at 13:10. 
"I don't expect a response, just think about what I said to you. If you both decide to go for it, then I will give it my all too. I will give you a roadmap for her to stand at the summut in three year's time. She has the talent for it."
Is "summut" a typo?
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>>8449
Yes, should be summit. Thanks for the catch, I don't do much editing until I complete a day, but will fix this for the next release. Nearly finished with the second day now, might release it tomorrow, but need to also as said, read through it all again and make edits to places that need it.
Finished reading it and found nothing else besides that typo. It is looking good, you have managed to once again keep things interesting while reasonably slow.
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>>8451
Thanks, good to get some feedback. Was a little worried it was perhaps a bit too much about swimming, but it's a great sport since you're basically naked, and this way they get to spend a lot of time together in that state ^^. (And I just love swimming myself, swam competitively for a while too.)
One of the things I do want to perhaps change a little when I finish writing day two, is the wrestling scene in the pool. Or was it lewd/hot enough? Might need to add some MC thoughts to it, or just make it a little longer.
Regarding the wrestling scene, it shouldn't be specially hot nor lewd but it should elicit some mixed feelings in the main character - since his own strange urges are what is pushing him into seeing it as hot. Most of the "moments" we see as the ideal for the characters getting on with fucking are products not only of the way they're presented but also - and mostly - from how we were conditioned to see their interactions. If you were to pick two characters from any romance story and leave them in a good scene but lacking context and unable to see it from their eyes it would be fucking hard to guess that they are even going out.
> tw-passagedata pid="32" name="DAY01.SCENE04.PART2"
> [...] "Julia, pizza's here!" [...]
Julia -> $sisName / $sisNick?
> tw-passagedata pid="43" name="DAY01.SCENE05.PART2.PATH2.INIT"
> tw-passagedata pid="44" name="DAY01.SCENE05.PART3.PATH1.INIT"
> Abreviated Homework Scene
Abbreviated?
> tw-passagedata pid="20" name="DAY01.SCENE04.PART1"
> I get up, and move out of the room, entering my $dad's home office at the end of the hallway. [...]
> tw-passagedata pid="92" name="DAY02.SCENE02.PART1"
> [...] I've brought the key's for my $dad's company car with me, a Tesla Model S.
In the non-incest version my dad's becomes my the landlord.
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>>8487
Thanks for catching those. I hope you enjoyed playing the game. Don't care too much about #3 though, the non-incest version really isn't supposed to make any sense. (The patch is only there because I didn't want to have to come back and make a patch later, should I need it. Doubt I'll ever really do, though. But it's easier to implement the patch as I'm writing stuff .)
Have finished writing day two now, at around 6k~ new words in total. Now doing a revising pass through what I've written for day two, to fix errors and make some scenes flow better.
How to uncensor these "housemate" and "landlord"?
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>>8496
And squeeze is written as such, not as "squize".
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>>8496
Two ways, on the screen you get when you first start the game, click on the "." after "Start Game" instead of "Start Game".
Or, open developer console, and type: "SugarCube.State.variables.patch = true".

>>8497 Will fix it in next version.
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I finished reading this, looks pretty good I say. During day 2 I found this, a word is missing.

>>8496
>NOTE: Loli and incest is disabled by default, press the "." after "Start Game" to enable it.
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>>8500
Thanks. Believe I already caught this will revising myself, but will make sure I did. Glad to hear that you enjoyed it. I'll try to upload the next version today, it has about 6k~ new words and finishes the second day.
How much time ingame it will take to the finale? A month, perhaps?
https://e-hentai.org/g/1614603/e11124f778/
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>>8503
Another typo found: physcis.
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>>8503
After the weekend is over, days will be getting skipped, with perhaps a short summary of things that happened in them. Then I'll write the important/interesting scenes out in detail. Have most of it planned out, but as I write, things change too, so can't give exact estimates how long it will take in-game.

>>8504
Thanks. Will be fixed in v0.6.0, which I hopefully get finished soon... But editing is take some time, I'm not entirely happy with some scenes. 

Started using Tweego instead of that goddamned Twine UI now, so hopefully I'll make less stupid spelling errors. Took some time to reorder all the passages in a logical fashion so that it's easier for me to work with, but that in turn will mean higher output in the future (I hope, and if it doesn't, I at least satisfied my OCD).
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>>8273 (OP) 
New version, day two is now complete. Story stands at 22941 words now. Changelog:
- finish day two
- revise day one
- revise day two

Thinking about posting it on fag95 now that it's a bit more polished, and has some content. Not sure if their moralfagging rules will permit it though.

As always, you need to rename the file from ".swf" to ".html". And to enable the loli and incest patch, click on the "." after "Start Game", instead of the text itself.
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>>8565
They forbid loli content, from what I recall.
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>>8565
There was a new error in the part that was present in the previous version. Want to take a screenshot?

And one new scene (the panic attack one) was almost entirely italicized. For what purpose? It was not only the dialogue part.
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>>8572
I get it, it was supposed to be his thoughts. Still, it seems something got wrong regardless. Another tagging error later: "And $mother praised me", some time after shower.
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>>8572
>There was a new error in the part that was present in the previous version. Want to take a screenshot?
Sure, if you remember where it is. Most likely a result of going from one big .html file to several .twee files, probably forgot to copy some part of some passage to the new files.

>And one new scene (the panic attack one) was almost entirely italicized. For what purpose? It was not only the dialogue part.
It's one of the scenes I was struggling with, I'll take a look if I messed up the italicization while working on it.

>>8578
Thanks, forgot to add it to the patch. Doing that now.
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>>8571
They ban 'pre-prebuscent', and only in some cases (shota tends to be allowed, even if if the boy is looking like a 9yo). But yeah, they're inconsistent as fuck, might try and post it, hoping that they don't care since it's text, and the girl is post-pubescent(if only barely).
>>8579
>It's one of the scenes I was struggling with, I'll take a look if I messed up the italicization while working on it.
This was indeed the case. It still has quite a bit of italics, but way less now, and it alternates. It's kind of hard to do a panic attack scene without inner-thoughts (and I don't want to break 'style' but suddenly not italicizing thoughts).
If you get me a screenshot of the error you mentioned or tell me the location, I'll fix that. In the meantime I'll continue writing new content.
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So, OP's sister is his girlfriend?
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>>8591
No, but she is into incest, and we like to role-play brother/sister incest scenarios. And she kind of looks like she's a loli because she's asian, small and flat. For the rest that message is basically accurate, but it's also there stave off complaints from normie moralfags.
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>>8587
Have two screenshots instead. The error message was too big to show at once, and I couldn't resize the popup either.
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>>8619
Fixed it, along with the other bugs. Thanks for reporting them. Changelog:
- fix bugs

As always, you need to rename the file from ".swf" to ".html". And to enable the loli and incest patch, click on the "." after "Start Game", instead of the text itself.
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I'd like to point out that in this scene, while brother and Sarah are 4 years apart with the default settings, this change if the player changes either the brother or the sister ages. In my playthrough, the brother was over 20 so pic related was wrong. 
Sure, this is just a minor detail but my point is that if you write scenes like pic in the future, you should take into account the player input in the settings or set the ages for all the characters by default.
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>>8812
How is writing the new content progressing? Would we see the entire third day written in a week?
https://e-hentai.org/g/253966/eb299c0b8a/
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>>8273 (OP) 
New update. Added some more scenes, removed the badly written rape scene, and reworked the way the patch is applied. Just enter "incest" in the box asking for a code, then press the "Activate Code" button. Changelog:
v0.6.6:
- added four scenes, 25899 words now
- fixed various typos

As always, rename the file from ".swf" to ".html", so that you can play it.

I ended up posting my game on fag95, the reception so far has been very positive, kind of happy about it. I'll keep posting here though, before I even post over there. Let me know if you guys like the new content.
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>>8812
Fixed this in my local version, will be in the next update. For now please ignore it and correct it in your head. 
>>8820
Can't give an ETA, it takes me quite a while to write scenes, I tend to edit/rewrite a little too much. But I just added a few more scenes, so enjoy reading those.
Why did you remove references to this from ATF? Hope it's nothing serious
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>>8834
Nothing serious, would just like to distance my 'developer identity' from my identity on ATF, so that I can post what I want there without random people linking the accounts to one another.
My game features a loli, but a 13-year old one, that is post-pubescent. ATF tends to feature some more extreme stuff.
If someone else wants to post my game on ATF, I have no problem with that. I have no problem with the site itself, and will keep using it (as a user).
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>>8823
I saw your game posted here today already.
https://lewdninja.com/game/61206-sistersitting-v061-i107760

>>8820
Oops, wrong link. This is the rest of that hentai, unfortunately without the younger sister.
https://e-hentai.org/g/290058/984b258a1b/
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>>8837
I'm becoming famous :D Well, I don't really care, although I don't really like people making a profit off of my work. But it means more people will read it, so I'll take it.
Blonde Tweens are always cute. Kind of a shame relatively few loli hentai is written with tween girls, they tend to be too young for me.
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>>8838
Agreed, but most hentai manga is black&white anyway, blonde or no blonde.
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>>8839
Oh, so that old trick with dotted images doesn't work here.
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>>8836

Gotcha. I also post there under a pseudonym different from my usual one.
>>8840
It works just fine for me in firefox. It might just be your resolution or how chrome renders images.
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>>8273 (OP) 
please add some options to change font and background colors, my eyes died
>>8851
I see a literally black square instead of a thumbnail.
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>>8838
Have another.
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I found this error message as I was playing, but I didn't saw anything out of place.
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>>8914
Fixed in the build up on fag95, but it doesn't actually break anything. You're at the end of the content, no worries. Next update will be next with the rest of day three.
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Hmm, I have a problem with placing the sis character on this graph. Where does she fit, height-wise?
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>>8916
She's about 150-160cm tall in my mind. Pretty hard to keep track of consistently in all scenes, so I'm sure I made a mistake somewhere.
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>>8917
Way too tall for a girl that is apparently flat chested and most likely very petite. Early in the game it says she's 5 ft 6 inches, thats a few inches taller than an average adult woman, yet this is supposed to be an "incest loli game". 

I would assume people attracted to this type of games will be making the sister pretty dam young, the game even defaults at 13 I think. Well this is all just my opinion, but you should make her much shorter, think about how tall a girl would be before she goes through puberty, certainly not 5"6, that's like giant for a pre-pubescent girl. But hey, it's your game, would it be difficult to add an input for height or other physical characteristics? 

Anyways it's not really a big deal so I don't mean to be negative, I can just ignore the cannon height and use my own, aside from that it's a great game so far, good writing, good job.
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>>8923
Same anon, my bad I completely forgot this is an html game and I could easily edit the height in the story if I really wanted to, so ignore my nitpicking above.
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>>8923
If it's a loli, it should be the 130-114 range in >>8916
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>>8923
>pre-pubescent
Actually 13yo is a cutoff age for the first menstruation, or even less, usually. A sporty girl would have it slightly later due to lower fat tissue content (meaning less available material for estrogen production).
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Menarche
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>>8924
That 5.5 feet was a mistake, meant for the non-patch version. I've already made it an option for the next version to have you pick it yourself at the start, the defaults will be 5.5feet for 18yo girl, 4.75 feet for 13yo girl. When you asked about it, I realized I forgot to implement the patch to actually change her height. My bad.

>>8938
I made her 13 because I wanted to be able to say she's post-pubescent. In the story she will be/is post-pubescent. It's not like there is one specific age for a girl to go through puberty. It won't have much effect on the story though, she's flat and bald, it just adds risk of pregnancy   I suppose (and less moralfags complaining).
>>8924
Nitpicking is good. I don't want you to feel like you have to edit my story to not lose immersion, so please point out any such issues.
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>>8273 (OP) 
Why is that girl sleeping in her school swimsuit?
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>>9055
Because school swimsuits are cute.
>>9055
because her brother is a meanie and keeps flipping her sleep shirt up while she is napping.
>>8823
Love the story so far, siblings' confusing relationship is described just right. Got a few errors towards the end in day 3 scene 3, haven't noticed any obvious typos. Keep delivering
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>>9165
Most of the bugs were fixed in the release on fag95, didn't upload it here because they were very minor and didn't stop any content from showing up.
Glad to hear you enjoyed the story, next update will be released this thursday, I've finished day three. Am now doing 'engine' reworks, implementing a new way for the patch to be enabled, enabling keyboard navigation, and various other stuff.
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>>9167
Oh, as well as implementing choices for the first day, to setup for the second route of the game. Will be slowly adding choices to more days, but this route's development is a lower priority.
>>8273 (OP) 
Hello anons, v0.7.0 is now done. Finishing day three, as well as adding some choices to day one (wip), and various engine changes. 
Changelog:
- add "DAY03.SCENE05"
- add "DAY03.SCENE06"
- revise entire day three.
- add choices for route selection to day one.
- revise day one.
- revise day two.
- add breast size selector for sister.
- make game navigable with keyboard, press keys 1-9 corresponding with choices. So generally press "1", if only one choice.
- have header stick to screen when you scroll down.
- rework patch to work with a "preset.js" file, if you want to disable the patch, just delete it.
- rework '.html' file to make no references to incest in the actual file.

Download: https://anonfiles.com/x7PblaVco2/Housesitting_v0.7.0_zip

Looking for feedback on new content, and any bugs you might find in regards to new engine changes as well as patch changes.
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>>9055
Because she wanna have sex with her brother, but she's too shy to just say it.
The new content is good and really kept me on edge. Good shit. Also, "Do not click"

I clicked and didn't get rickrolled. Now I am mad.
>>9212
Good work, right in the feels. The way mc is freaking out, again, nailed it. No typos noticed.
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>>9323
Glad to hear it. Was a little worried about the conversation where they make up, but guess it was fine.
>>9212
fucked something up, fix here: https://anonfiles.com/J3YbfbW1oe/Housesitting_v0.7.1_-_PREPATCHED_zip
Meh.
Writing isn't bad, but it's too wordy.
Feels like too much fluff and not enough progression. We care about the relationship between the main characters, not some bullshit swim thing or drama with their parents. I mean, those things matter too for context, but we don't want you wasting a ton of time writing WORDS WORDS WORDS WORDS about them that you could be spending building erotic tentsion or getting imouto pregnant.
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>>9554
To further their relationship, external forces are required. Normally, a brother and sister won't be fucking, so something needs to happen. The relationship between parents and siblings, and stress from swimming are necessary for the outline of the plot I have in mind.
If I were to skip all the non-sexual content, the story would become disheveled in my belief, and it would not be the story I want to tell.
Anyway, thanks for the feedback and checking the game out. Hopefully future updates will be more to your liking.
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>>8273 (OP) 
I am a simple anon with simple desires. Is there or will there be any butt stuff? Anal, rimming, face-sitting. Just anything to do with a butt.
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>>9597
Honestly, haven't thought that far ahead. Sex between sister and brother is still a ways of. But, I have nothing against anal, so it's quite possible I'll make a scene.
>>9596
The story progresses slowly, bit it doesn't feel worse for it, quite the opposite, actually. IMO you are good with your pacing as you are, shouldn't break it for more impatient anons here. As of fun content, the more vanilla, sensual stuff is appropriate for this relationship, and going full degenerate isn't necessary to make sex interesting as some may lead to believe
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>>9621
I'm not planning to change the pacing, day four will be the slowest yet, which I'm a little concerned about. It will be the end of the prologue (fri-mon), and I need to setup some things before I start skipping days. But it means there's little sexual content, so might just wait with releasing it until I finish day 'five' (actually day six).
Will there be any content along the lines of her trying to entice you with casual partial or full nudity down the line?
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I just want loli sister pussy.
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>>9807
That's one of my fetishes, so there's definitely some plans for that later on.

>>9935
Who doesn't. It's going to be a while, though.
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New update, v0.7.4, with three more scenes, nothing too exciting, if you're patient I'd wait for v0.8.0 instead of playing this.
Download: http://www.mediafire.com/file/tqjef64502fgbjt/Housesitting+v0.7.4+-+PRE-PATCHED.zip/file
My man1
>>10037
I'll heed your advice. Following the flow of story is important for establishing the proper ambience.
>>9954
>That's one of my fetishes, so there's definitely some plans for that later on.
Yes.  Finally something to satisfy my autism.  I'm the fag that made this shit in the AIDungeon thread  https://ghostbin.com/jw4eKG
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>>10123
I've also played around a little with AI dungeon, pretty nifty concept. Haven't tried the paid version, and the free version requires a little bit too much editing/rolling back for me.
Might as well just write my own story at that point, if I'm editing every line ^^.
there hasn't even been any physical contact yet but the raw sexual tension between you and your sister has me rock hard. please, keep going
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>>10242
I still haven't touched it yet, waiting for 1.0.  Your description gives me high hopes though.
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>>10250
Well, that's going to take a pretty long time.

Also, probably no release this week. Have been busy with real work, so apart from some 'engine' changes I haven't been able to write much.
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>>10415
>Well, that's going to take a pretty long time.
I was under the impression you were close and massive progress was being made often due to the project being young and you having so many ideas that mainly amounted to putting them into writing.  But if that's the case, I'll just play the latest version.
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>>10037
Only gone through day 2 so far.  Should I be specifying scenes and times, or is quoted text enough?
>where it longes, rubbing slowly
Do you mean lounges?
>Your sister gets in the front seat again, and Sarah gets in the back.
This line is in second person when all the others are in first person.
>What breast... She undoes the clasp and lets them free.
breasts*
>She then leans forward. Her legs look smooth as silk; there's not a hair in sight. Mom must have taught her how to shave. What a sight.
It seems weird to be having this thought when you already saw her legs when she was in nothing but a towel in her room, and it explicitly stated they were shaven.  Also, the use of "sight" twice so closely together feels odd.
>67.182 seconds
>Congratulations Julia. You're under seventy seconds now! Hard work does pay off.
Not sure if nearly or over 3 whole seconds is a bit much for an experienced swimmer like her to beat her record by.
>"Wrong $girlRelShort. You're it." She struggles free and pushes me away.
You can figure this one out.
>How she lets the water roll of her perfect breast
off* breasts*  I suppose technically one could use the singular "breast" to refer to whole of the chest area, but in both cases I've pointed out it reads weirdly and looks like a typo.
>Girls don't think like That.
that*
>park the other car that I had abanded the day before, too.
abandoned*
>Now it needs to rest three minutes. Let's go get $sis.
More code.
>To do that, you need to win come first in the Olympic Trials in three years.
Either eliminate "win" or "come first".
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>>10540
I write it in my spare time, so updates generally aren't that big. Around 10k~ words for a full day.

>>10569
Thanks, fixing them now.
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>>10570
quoted text is more than enough, I've fixed them all now. Thanks again.
Is the Back button supposed to be limited in its ability to go backward?  Sometimes I can go back several times, sometimes I can only back once, but I inevitably hit a wall where the Back button sends me forward in time instead of back.  Might be at the beginning of scenes.  It also seems like sometimes the back button moves you back several steps and sometimes it only moves you back one step.
>I grab her training suit, her swim goggles, swim cap, and a towel for her, and put everything in my bag.
You also grab her techsuit, and it seems like this is omitted here.  Maybe it's implied you grabbed it and put it in the bag earlier with,
>I grab it and pull on it. Not very elastic at all.
But that doesn't seem very clear.
>"It's almost one. We should hurry." I tell them as we unlock a large locker for our clothes.
It's odd that the characters speak of AM/PM time when the game clock uses 24 hour time.  Not necessarily something that needs to be fixed.
>I put on my own swimming briefs and head out of the changing booth.
>chest and move down slowly, while pulling on my swimming trunks, displacing them
>I grab my swimming trunks from beside me and cum into them. 
You call them briefs everywhere else prior, but during the masturbation scene, you call them trunks.
>I grab my swimming trunks from beside me and cum into them. Shit, bad idea. Well, it's going in the washer anyway.
You later let Julia handle the laundry while you go grocery shopping, and don't seem to acknowledge at all that she'd be handling your cum soaked swimwear.  Do you just forget, and this is intentional?  Is it just assumed that she doesn't smell anything and happens not to touch the swimming briefs when putting the laundry in the washer?  I've yet to see any acknowledgement of this.  Probably something she'd bring up when confessing to you about spying on your masturbation with Sarah, if it's to be brought up at all.
>"They're in the washer. I didn't want to make you wait while I looked for another pair, so I came down in my towel." I gulp. She says it like it's normal. But basically, I'm sharing a blanket with her while she's naked.
>She's crying, screaming at me. I pull her towards me and hold her tight. Tears flow down my cheek as I hold her. The blanket is no longer covering her, and she's basically naked now, but she nor I pay it any mind.
>We let go of each other, and she gets back under her blanket, covering herself as she blushes slightly.
I'm confused about her state of dress, or undress, in this scene.  She came down in a towel and now she's under the blanket on the couch.  Is she "basically naked" under the blanket, or actually naked?  Is she wearing the towel under there, and if not, where did she put the towel?  If she's totally nude under there and no longer has the towel at all, you ought to mention the MC looking at the towel lying somewhere in the room nearby.  She could just being laying herself down on top of the towel with the blanket on her, effectively naked under the blanket but still having the towel.  When she's sat up and you're pulling her close, is she then totally naked, or just "basically naked" as in there's nothing but a towel on her despite you hugging her?
>We head up the stairs, she gets into her pajama, and we meet up again in the bathroom where we brush our teeth.
Again, going off my previous confusion, is she going upstairs in nothing but her blanket, or did she get the towel, wherever it was, and is wearing it while carrying her blanket upstairs?  Or is she wearing both?
>she gets into her pajama,
pajamas*
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>She's cute, such awesome breast. And kind of naughty...
breasts*
>"I know, I know... It's the only one I have"—she sighs"I normally don't really wear bikinis."
sighs, "I*
>Go downstairs and cook diner[1]
>Bring your sister her diner[1]
dinner*
>All I have to is roster all her tasks into the day.
to do*
>I the computer down and get up from the desk.
I set*
>She turns onto her back and starts doing backstroke.
"backstrokes" or "a backstroke"
>I'm three-quarter way through the pool when she passes me.
three-quarters of the way*
>She's already several feet ahead of me, and she's gaining on me.
How can she be both ahead of you and gaining on you i.e. catching up?
>"I splutter, "I can't. Need to breathe."
Remove the first quotation mark.
>He clucks his tongue, "Expensive taste as always."
clicks*
>My sister is sitting on the lat pulldown machine with her back to.
to me.*

If you choose not to peek throught the peephole, Sarah's shower teasing scene and the first swimming scene that day are skipped and it goes straight to the changing room again so Julia can change out of her techsuit.  This choice doesn't have a big yellow WIP warning on it, so I assume it's not supposed to be this broken right now.
>It's good that you realized that what you did was wrong and that you feel bad about it." I'm a goddamn hypocrite.
Thinking you're a hypocrite here seems odd if you made the choice not to use the peephole.  You can feel guilty about thinking of your sister lewdly, but I'm not sure I'd call it being hypocritical here if you're not chastising her for doing something you yourself did.

I believe I've gone through all the content now, unless there's anything unique following, but not immediately following, any of the WIP choices. I ignored them due to the big yellow warning and seeing that the story immediately following them proceeded as if the other choice had been selected.  Seeing as how it's inevitable that you'll be dating or at least attempting to date Sarah, I hope this doesn't lead down a route of infidelity.  Don't really like cheating.

>Flood detected
Fuck, I hate this gay-ass shit.  I don't even know how long it will take until I can post again since I make chain posts so rarely.
>>10624
>Is the Back button supposed to be limited in its ability to go backward?  
I reworked the back button this weekend, to go back only one choice instead of a scene. Hopefully that's better. (Details here https://www.LINK REMOVED.com/posts/some-engine-work-42104686, sorry for shilling Patreon, but cba copy pasting it here).

>It's odd that the characters speak of AM/PM time when the game clock uses 24 hour time.  >Not necessarily something that needs to be fixed.
Kind of intentional, the "information bar" is outside of the game, but the game's setting is set in the US, so the characters use AM/PM.

>You call them briefs everywhere else prior, but during the masturbation scene, you call them trunks.
Will probably fix this, but using "briefs" everywhere gets a little repetitive in my head. Still, they're not really the same thing, so consistency is probably best.

>You later let Julia handle the laundry while you go grocery shopping, and don't seem to acknowledge at all that she'd be handling your cum soaked swimwear.  Do you just forget, and this is intentional?
Yes... Totally intentional. And definitely not me forgetting. For sure. (Not sure how I will fix it, will think on it.)

>I'm confused about her state of dress, or undress, in this scene.  She came down in a towel and now she's under the blanket on the couch.
I believe I intended for her to be 'wearing' the towel, will give this scene a re-read and then fix it if that's not clear enough.

>Again, going off my previous confusion, is she going upstairs in nothing but her blanket, or did she get the towel, wherever it was, and is wearing it while carrying her blanket upstairs?  
In my mind she's 'wearing' the towel and carrying her blanket to cover herself.

>>10625
>She's already several feet ahead of me, and she's gaining on me.
Not to reword this, as in she's already ahead of you, and increasing the distance between you at the same time.

>If you choose not to peek throught the peephole, Sarah's shower teasing scene and the first swimming scene that day are skipped and it goes straight to the changing room again so Julia can change out of her techsuit.  This choice doesn't have a big yellow WIP warning on it, so I assume it's not supposed to be this broken right now.
Hmm, I thought I fixed this for v0.7.4, are you on the latest version? In any case, I will make sure it's fixed for the next release, it is indeed not supposed to be that way.

>Thinking you're a hypocrite here seems odd if you made the choice not to use the peephole.  You can feel guilty about thinking of your sister lewdly, but I'm not sure I'd call it being hypocritical here if you're not chastising her for doing something you yourself did.
Very true, I'll add a check for the peeping variation of the scene for that part.

>Seeing as how it's inevitable that you'll be dating or at least attempting to date Sarah, I hope this doesn't lead down a route of infidelity.  >Don't really like cheating.
No cheating will be involved, not on your sister or Sarah. I hope my plan for her works out, but of course I can't know that for sure until I finish it.

I think you are playing the v0.7.1 maybe, since the v0.7.4 has some fixes for stuff that you mentioned, and a few more scenes.
Thanks so much for all the corrections, I hope you enjoyed reading the story, will fix all the stuff I did not comment on right away.
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>>10625
>Flood detected
>Fuck, I hate this gay-ass shit.  I don't even know how long it will take until I can post again since I make chain posts so rarely.
Same... I can't link my Patreon here it seems, but it is just "i107760" on Patreon, the most recent post. (If you care about the details about the new UI/back buttons).
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>Not to reword this, as in she's already ahead of you, and increasing the distance between you at the same time.
Should be "Got to..."
>>10629
>https://www.LINK REMOVED.com/posts/some-engine-work-42104686, sorry for shilling Patreon
>>10630
>I can't link my Patreon here it seems
Do you know where you are?

>>10629
>I think you are playing the v0.7.1 maybe, since the v0.7.4 has some fixes for stuff that you mentioned
I'm on 0.7.4, the version linked here  >>10037
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>>10632
Honestly, never bothered even trying to link a Patreon here before. Nor even seen anyone else try. So had no idea if it was even possible. Seen links to ci-en I believe, although that's for moon so I guess there's less people shilling themselves.

Good to know you're on the latest, will take a look then what I fucked up (again). Because I do recall fixing that before.
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>>10633
Nevermind, I fixed a very similar bug in a very similar place. It's fixed now, thanks again for all the detailed corrections.
>>10415
>Also, probably no release this week.
Or this week either, it seems.
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>>11076
I actually just released v0.7.7, but yes, got stuck at work until just a bit ago. Posted it just before midnight, so technically still made it.
Would still recommend waiting for v0.8.0 though, not entirely happy with the new content and day four in general. So plan to rewrite quite a bit.

Download: http://www.mediafire.com/file/ukibx07p9r9xykh/Housesitting_v0.7.7_-_PRE-PATCHED.zip/file
Changelog:
- fix loads of typos and errors (thanks anon)
- finish "DAY04.SCENE03"
- add "DAY04.SCENE04"
- add "DAY04.SCENE05" (incomplete)
- work on the engine>>11076
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>>11084
Thanks bro
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I don't think the future dual route choices throughout the story are a good idea.  You're defining the MC as either one or another character with them.  Besides the clusterfuck of having to reconcile all the differences these choices will make in the long term with regards to story specifics, there's still the issue of the MC constantly acting out of character by choosing opposing route choices.  You'd be much better off with only one route choice in the very beginning that determines if you're taking the stern or affectionate route.  You can still keep all the minor non-route choices that have little to no butterfly effect on the story, like choosing to peep or not in the pool showers.  And you can still keep all the short game over options where the MC decides to attempt lewding too soon or other disasterous ideas.  As it is you're already writing the affectionate route first and foremost with the stern route being something you plan to do when that's finished.  Better to just focus on that as the primary story until it's complete and do the stern version of the story entirely afterwards if you still have the creative momentum by that point.
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the guy up above is right. making many branches is the recipe to bloat and slow development
see: Kobold
>>11871
Yes, primary route is definitely my focus. I do want to make a shorter route where you are more dominant, plan is to offer some choices in the early days, then if you have enough 'points', you can commit to that route, play through it and get its ending.
And I have plans for a route, that you can choose where you don't get with your sister. Which is optional, and only a few scenes, just leading to a different ending.

Unrelated to that, I will be busy with work until next week Friday, so will not be releasing any updates today/next week.
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>>11877
>Two more weeks total before next update minimum
You keep recommending to wait for 0.8.0, but I'm going to play and proofread the new scenes anyways at this point.
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Reaction to the first few pages:

>I've been caring for her, for a pretty long time.
Remove the comma. Otherwise, the writing is good.

>Enter the house[1]
Oh sweet, keyboard shortcuts I don't even have to look up! However, when I press 1 and then down to scroll the rest of the text into view, I go back from 16:05 to 16 and the new text disappears. In fact, pressing any key other than a hotkey to advance, including PgDn, End, Space, Tab, and Shift, rolls the state back a step. I'm running Firefox with few addons, if it matters.
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>>11879
I wish I could develop it faster, but really am very busy with work sadly. One of my coworkers has been absent for the past 5 months, and now another one has corona, so only 3/5 people left on the team.

>>12028
>In fact, pressing any key other than a hotkey to advance, including PgDn, End, Space, Tab, and Shift, rolls the state back a step. I'm running Firefox with few addons, if it matters.
Yeah, I fucked something up, it's fixed now so that only "left arrow" and "backspace" go back a choice.
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>>12028
I won't be making a new release to fix this bug, but if you want to fix it yourself you can fix the two known bugs yourself by opening the ".html" file and doing the following: https://pastebin.com/NTiZ0Scy
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>>12038
>One of my coworkers has been absent for the past 5 months, and now another one has corona, so only 3/5 people left on the team.
Sounds tiring.
>>12040
Thanks for that.
>The girl, wearing a slutty $educationgirl-outfit
There might be a better way, but <<print $education>>girl will do the trick.

>"Ah, do you want something to drink too?"—I ask her as I stand up—
English doesn't punctuate bits of narration in the middle of dialogue like this.

Speaking a little more generally, the dialogue has a lot of lines like this:
>Thanks Bernie, I'm hungry, I'll be down right away.
Stiff, wooden, flat, on-the-nose. I think they need more implicit connections, like when the sister asks whether "they" (the parents) will break up.
>I want to eat together with you, so I'll wait.
The cause and effect here is too neat, you know?
Sometimes it reads like you're using the dialogue to convey simple "and then this happened" bits of storytelling, or tell us why the character is saying what they're saying.
>The adrenaline is leaving my body now, and suddenly I feel so tired. And I want to get out of this suit already. It truly is a pain.
This reads like this is her third day in a human body, and she's keeping an audio diary of the experiment. A tired teen/tween girl complaining about an uncomfortable suit doesn't sound like this.
Or I could be the only one with this reaction. Such is feedback.

Also, DAY03.SCENE03.PATH1.PART1 could use a grammar pass. I saw a "her's" and a "them" that should be an "it".
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>>12087
I suck at dialogue. Have always wanted to revisit most of it, when I'm better at writing it. Will try to redo the dialogue you pointed out specifically.
>There might be a better way, but <<print $education>>girl will do the trick.
It shouldn't use variable in the first place, was introduced accidentally when sed'ing school->$education, due to Patreon's bullshit about games set in school.
>Also, DAY03.SCENE03.PATH1.PART1 could use a grammar pass.
Will do when I get home tonight, thanks.
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>>12088
In your defense, the characterization is very good; I know what bro and sis want, why they want it, and I care whether they get it. Sis' swimming serves many purposes, and the smut and non-smut are better together than apart, which is rare. What little we've seen of the parents so far has already made them more interesting than the usual conveniently-absent sources of money, housing, and dysfunctional sexual behavior.
Hey, author-kun, how are you doing? Did your busy week go well?
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>>12702
Yes, I'm working on the game now. Have to admit that I spent most of the weekend starting a FreeCities play-through, getting annoyed by the RA and finishing my plans to rework large sections of it. But that's done now, after two months of delaying it.
So now fully focused on finishing v0.8.0, plan is to release it this Friday if I finish it, or next week Friday.
>>12703
>getting annoyed by the RA
This is how I know you were actually playing Free Cities.
>and finishing my plans to rework large sections of it
Nice.
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>>12709
Well, RA should be much less annoying when my MR goes through: https://gitgud.io/pregmodfan/fc-pregmod/-/merge_requests/8128
At this point, I have so many RA rules that my arcology is basically fully automated. Took kind of too long, the more bugs I fixed, the more I found and it just kept on going.
>>12703
https://paste.ee/r/X0aVI

Start a new game, load in these RA settings. This is what I use. It works really well for me and I can use these basic rules to make petite healthy sluts from first game to late game.

It isn't perfect, but I rarely touch it.

Adjust the rules for what you want after loading. The json export is autism -- they shouldn't export empty values and instead have non-explicit values default to null if not stated. that'd reduce the size a lot.
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>>12725
not him but thanks bro
hate having to remake a new ruleset whenever i decide to start playing freecities again
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>>12725
>>12775
I have my own set of rules, they're pretty advanced ^^ Basically, never have to touch a slave by hand, everything is automated. Of course, you should tweak it to your own tastes. It's pretty incest focused ^^ Link: https://gitgud.io/i107760/fc-pregmod/-/blob/i107760-mod/ra_rules.txt
never understood the appeal of incest
is it something related to how you love your family and it's taboo?
i don't really like my family so i've never felt it
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>>12783
Stop asking stupid moralfag question and you'll get it.
i'm not moralfagging
i just don't get it
the fact that a lot of the incest has loli makes up for it, but i still don't get it.
>>12786
Half of it is because they adore the relation between a sister and their sibling, finding it to be on a deeper level.
The other half is because "Don't touch the big red button that says 'Press Me Hard Oni-chan!'."
There, is that a good enough answer?
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>>12786
Don't ask questions. You'll either pick it up and add it to the list of fetishes eventually or you'll continue to just be in it for the loli.
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>>12787
well if you actually mean it and aren't just parroting what i said before, then yeah, that's what i wanted to know
>>12788
true. i was really into bestiality when i was a teen, and for some reason it just stopped afterwards.
>>12786
I'm sure an awful lot of people who beat off to incest don't even actually have the pertinent relatives. It's probably a lot easier to fetishize a sister you don't have.
that makes 100x more sense
>Enter how tall your sister is: four-and-six-sevenths foot tall
Okay you're obviously fucking with me.
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>>12850
It doesn't actually matter for the story, I just changed it when somebody pointed out she was too tall. And because I hate the Imperial measurement system I went and picked something retardedly long. 
I considered "nine-elevenths foot tall" for a bit, but thought it was too memey. Basically, she's supposed to be around five feet tall, feel free to set it as you wish, it really doesn't change anything.
>>12851
I did.
>I hate the Imperial measurement system I went and picked something retardedly long
Yes this is what I meant. It was obviously made by a European making fun of Imperial measurements.
>>12851
ever considered...
using the metric system instead of memeing?
woah
it was funny, though
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>>12884
Game is set in the US, so sadly kind of limited to using imperial for immersion's sake.
>>12851
You tickle my autism with that shit. Every time I change it to something like 4 feet 11 inches.
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>>12888
Just edit the preset.js file. It will keep working with future updates, so you just need to replace the .html and your customization is kept.
>>12703
Been two weeks
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>>13349
It will come this Friday.
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>>13350
I will cum this Friday.
As promised, today's update: http://www.mediafire.com/file/ub2k8euzc7d9cl2/Housesitting_v0.8.0_-_PRE-PATCHED.zip/file.
Too lazy to post changelog/thoughts here, so if you want to read that shit, go fag95 or my Patreon.
>>13412
how does the fact that people are fapping to your creation makes you feel?
how weird is it?
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>>13418
Not very weird, it's written as an adult game, just one with a bit more of a story than most ^^ 
I work on pregmod and used to work on "Jack-o-nine-tails", which are way more explicit and fucked up, so don't really feel embarrassed about writing some loli smut at all.
If anything is strange for me, it's the fact that I'm getting some monetary support for it, which feels nice and is motivating, but not the reason I'm making it.
>>13412
>Too lazy
Negro, just copy paste it. You know no one wants to go to fag95, and saying go to patreon reads poorly even if you are posting a non-patreon link to your game.
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>>13425
It's pretty big wall of text most 'casual' players won't really be interested in, but sure, here you go:

It's here, finally. The fourth day is now complete, which finishes the "prologue" to the game. I found it a hard day to write; there wasn't too much happening, it was mostly preparatory work for new content, and it featured much dialogue, which is not my strong suit. Most of the time spent on this update was dedicated to the conversation with the landlady, which admittedly is still far from perfect, but for now, it's the best thing I could come up with. 
It was pretty hard to wrap all the plot points up while not making the conversation too long. I've tried to keep it reasonably interesting but felt it was important, and some time should be spent on it. The last scene of the day I'm pretty happy with didn't take too long to write. I then started reading through the entire day from the start to see if there were any areas where I could make improvements and made them when I found them. I think the day as a whole flows better now, and I focused on the cooking scene as well since some saw it as filler. Hopefully, it's better now that it showcases what's going through the boy's mind.

I also wrote the first diary entry, which summarizes the fifth day that gets skipped, but decided against including it in v0.8.0 because I still need to tinker some more with it; I need to improve the display/graphical aspect, as well as fix some of the writing I'm unhappy with.
I plan to release it as an individual scene in the coming days to get some feedback on it, to see if this is what people imagined when they voted for diary pages to summarize skipped days. It also felt strange to include the summary of the fifth day without any content for the sixth day itself.

I'm not sure when the next release will be, and not going to make any promises. I feel bad about not being able to deliver on them, and it's tough to predict how long writing an update will take, because every scene is different. I want to include day five, the date with Sarah, and work on the game's second route for the next update. I hope you enjoyed the update, and sorry once again for taking so long.
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>>13430
Looks smaller than I expected, probably because Patreon UI sucks ass. Will just include it in the future along with updates, with link at the top so people can ignore it entirely.
just spoiler it or something next time
>>13412
I noticed this and thought it was neat. Spoilered for those who haven't finished day four yet.

>I then open the door to her room and motion with my head for her to follow. I walk to the door to the hallway, and turn the lock[...]
>I walk into my room with my sister in tow and sit down on my bed. I point at the door and tell her, "Can you lock it?" She nods and does so.

He locks her door, and she locks his. The kind of exchange typical of a close relationship, but not perfectly symmetrical, for he initiates both halves. Is it because he's the male partner, the elder, or the more incestuously-minded? Probably some mix, but as they get closer and things get less plausibly deniable, I'm curious to see sis' appetite / sense of pacing.
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>>13449
Heh, honestly wasn't thinking about that as I was writing it, but interestingly enough it does fit the characterization I was going for...
It's cool to see that the actions I saw them take in my head, and wrote down, are being interpreted in the way I imagined their character to be, without actively trying to portray it in that scene.
Was mainly going for them starting to go behind their parents' backs and keeping secrets from them. 

The sister doesn't really (consciously) feel attracted to her brother yet, but I'm writing toward that, hopefully the plan I have for it works out. 
For the brother's actions, I'm trying to make it not entirely clear what his motivations at this point are, because he doesn't know himself. Slowly, but surely he is starting to act on his attraction though, which I hopefully portrayed in a nice way.
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Just got through saturday and let me say the writing is excellent, many of descriptions and events are so specific and detailed I have trouble imagining that they are anything else than a recounting of events that actually occurred albeit modified is some small ways.

Oh and I found a couple small errors in the text.
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>>13506
Glad to hear you enjoyed it, it's all purely my imagination, though. Which shows from the dialogue, since it's quite crappy.
Thanks for reporting the little typos, I've fixed them now.
>two weeks without status update
Is that dead already?
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>>14461
Same, I want that loli sister pussy.
>>14461
It's not dead, but don't expect constant updates. I write it in my free time when I feel like it, it's a hobby. And I don't have much free time.

Since you seem to want a status update, here is the one from my Patreon:
Hey guys, sorry for not posting this during the weekend after I released v0.8.0 like I had intended to. 
Basically, what happened is that I believed to be able to finish writing it, and I did. But it was way too long, and I wasn't happy with it. Plus I wanted to incorporate some more of her thoughts into it.

So I ended up wanting to rewrite it, but didn't manage to do it until today, due to a lack of time and a lack of motivation too, I guess. 
In any case, I rewrote it again today and am decently happy with it, so would love your feedback on it to see if it works (from the text to the graphical representation).

It was harder than I expected, it needs to have a different tone than the usual writing, and not be too long. Or too short. And still be interesting to read, and give you some insight into her character and the way she experienced things.

PS. If you're wondering about the "lack of motivation", don't worry too much. 
I certainly don't intend to abandon the project, at all. It's a hobby, I enjoy writing it and interacting with players.
The lack of motivation was due to 1. being really tired from my daily life (I slept for 15 hours yesterday), and 2. due to getting some bad reviews, which I know I shouldn't let affect me since I knew from the start it wouldn't be immensely popular or become a big thing, but it's still disappointing, and when you're tired, kills motivation.
But as said, do not worry, I felt like writing today and enjoyed it. I worked on the outline for the next day as well, and am starting to get an idea for how it will play out. I hope to get some more time soon to continue working on the next update, but won't make any promises about when it will come.

http://www.mediafire.com/file/f2n96ausuor2456/Housesitting_-_DAY05.DIARY.html/file
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>>14530
So we can have some lewd scenes with the sister.
>>14530
Sorry for not giving feedback on this sooner. The diary entry reads like a diary entry. It advances the plot a little, it does what it's supposed to do.
I'm ambivalent about reading from sis' perspective. On the one hand, seeing these things from both sides is often more interesting/arousing than just the one. On the other, it's more engaging to wonder what someone is thinking, or to discover it, than to be told. Maybe we should see bro's diary entries instead? But I'm not sure he's the diary-keeping type...
Also,
>I wanted to ask him if I could sleep there again, but I didn't, he doesn't like it. He says I'm too old now.
made me laugh, even though that's not the way she or he meant it.
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>>15143
>made me laugh
I don't understand how that's funny?
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>>15144
>He says I'm too old now.
>13 year old sister
>too old, do not want
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>>15164
Ah.
I want this story to not dead.
>>17411
Think it is
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>>17411
It has come back from the dead at least once already.
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>>17411
>>18849
>>19018
Not dead, just slow release schedule. Working 60+ hours per week right now, really don't have time or energy to work on it much.

New update is out, a big one, 7500 words. Four new scenes. Download: https://www.mediafire.com/file/yqwx8xjgy3i5le5/Housesitting_v0.8.4_-_PRE-PATCHED.zip/file

Changelog:
- Added DAY05.Diary
- Added DAY06.SCENE01
- Added DAY06.SCENE02
- Added DAY06.SCENE03

Patreon post:
The update is finally here, adding four new scenes, adding more than 7500 words. I hope it was worth the wait. To all the patrons that stuck around despite that, I thank you a lot! And for those who didn't, I hope you will press the "follow" button, so you can keep following the story, I don't do it for the money as said before.

This update is mainly about the date with Sarah, and Sarah in general. We get a glimpse of her family, I hope to show some characteristics of the mother in the daughter, to show how her being raised has influenced her and the contrast with our protagonist, and his reaction to that.
Writing the date was pretty hard as expected, it's a lot of dialogue, and I haven't gone on a 'first date' myself in a while. I had to try my damnedest to recall those sensations unique to it, and write it down. I do hope I managed to make things interesting, let me know.
The restaurant scene ends on a bit of a sour note, our protagonist is afraid that he might have messed things up at the end. I hope to have accurately portrayed his anxiety over it, and that you like how it was resolved.

The next update will focus on the evening spend at home; the girl's reaction to the date, them talking about it, and other things. Look forward to it :)
>>19607
When we will be getting that loli sister pussy?
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>>19607
Hot damn, I did not expect an update.
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>>19607
Belated thanks.
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>>19663
Not for a while. In a few updates, things should progress into that direction, though.
>>19729
I've been posting regular updates on my Patreon, available to the public, so you can always check there if you're doubting I'm still alive. Not sure when next update will come, working on it right now.
>>20104
Not a problem. I try to post here whenever I release an update, not planning to stop doing that, so just checking the catalogue for my game every so often will also keep you up to date.
>>19607
typo:
>Also, in the car, I asked $siName if she was wearing makeup this Saturday
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>>20567
Yeah caught it after releasing the update, but didn't feel like releasing a fix since it's so minor. Thanks though for the report!
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>>20643
>caught it after releasing
Those bugs are the skinned palms of development: lotta pain relative to the actual harm. On the plus side, it's a reminder you actually make a release.
Latest version gives the error "No valid storage adapters found" in Ungoogled Chromium. Works fine on Palememe though. Mostly just skimming the days before the latest content I haven't viewed, starting with the panty sniffing on Day 04.
>Day 02 - Saturday, 20:40. Living Room. DAY02.SCENE07.PATH1.PART6
>they'll realize how stupid they have been.
I feel like "they have" should be "they've" to be more naturalistic.
>Day 04 - Monday, 21:51. The Home Gym. DAY04.SCENE05.PATH1.PART1
>she's a petite woman with bags under her eyes. She has large blue eyes and golden hair in a sleep updo style.
I find it odd her physical description occurs here instead of the first time she appears. Is this intentional?
>Day 04 - Monday, 22:09. The Sunroom. DAY04.SCENE05.PATH1.PART2
>I give her a nervous smile, swallow, then say, "Of course, mom. I'd really like that. And Julia would like it too." She slumps down in her chair and sighs in relief, then moves to speak—I sit up straight and look her in the eyes and tell her, "We need to talk about something first." She looks at me, puzzled, and waits for me to elaborate.
>"More involved, what does that mean exactly?"
>"I've spoken with your father, about our problems, and how to go on." She swallows and continues, "I will spend less time at work, and more at home, with the two of you. I want to get to know you both, right now I feel like we're practically strangers."
I find this whole exchange confusing. MC is supposed to elaborate, but then a question is asked and it's unclear who asked it, which is then followed by the mother talking about the previous topic from PART1 of this scene. The questioned posed appears to quote or paraphrase something that wasn't said. Is this just a work in progress placeholder scene? Is a big chunk missing accidentally? Did you place the text from the wrong scene in here? Maybe I'm just tired, but this part is very weird.
>The diary page style
Suddenly paper seems a bit odd, and has a strong effect on the tone. It's very bright. I'd suggest a more subdued color, along with making it something other than basic ruled paper, like something with a little frilliness to it that a young girl might actually keep as her diary.
>When done, I went straight into the shower. 
Sounds a little more detached than the rest of the diary. I suggest, "When I was done," instead.
>Click the "⋙" to continue to the next day's scene! Still thinking of a way to improve this. 
Place a creased corner in the bottom right of the page as a clickable button to continue. Place a "[1]" just outside of the paper indicating that is the forward button as in all other sections.
>Day 06 - Wednesday, 17:55. On the road.DAY06.SCENE03.PATH1.PART1
>Shit, relax./ Feeling a little awkward with my hands just bungling in the air
There's a forward slash that ought not be there.
>Day 06 - Wednesday, 20:20. Sarah's Driveway.DAY06.SCENE03.PATH1.PART10
>I had a wonderful time. Also, in the car, I asked $siName if she was wearing makeup this Saturday, and she was. So I win...
$siName should be obvious.
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>No Gaytreon updates for 2.5 months
>No posts in the thread for 2 months
Did he died?
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>>25876
good things never last
>>25876
I haven't died (although I nearly did kill myself), have just been very depressed and burned out. Moved to a different city now, and my state of mind is not good. 
The attempts I made at writing all sucked, I really hate my writing, not fit for release. Deleted it all and haven't gotten the energy to try again. Need to fix my real-life first.
>>26704
I don't care for loli shit, and I wouldn't have my life impacted in the slightest by you roping. But I still don't want you to off yourself, and instead want you to get your shit together and find fulfillment in life. You can do it anon.
>>26704
Write it, do it for the loli sister pussy.
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>>26704
don't die
>>26704
why is everyone mentally ill online
finish the story and kys afterwards
>>26704
Get a resistance band and start working out. Go for long walks, at least a mile a day. Eat plenty of fruit, especially apples. Won't fix anything, but the endorphins will help.
hi pug
>>26704
Without a gaytreon update or new update in this thread, there is no prood this is sistersitting anon and not just someone fucking with everyone.
Don't delete it. Post your shit writing and let others criticize it so that it may improve.
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>>26818
no proof*
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>>26819
>Another month has passed
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I has been over half a year now since the last gaytreon update. The dream is dead.
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>>32529

OP is alive elsewhere. Content is soon™
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>>11085
More like this?
>>32529
>mfw no loli sister pussy
Why live?
>>33570
I don't believe you.
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>>35265
Just check the gaytreon or fag95 and see for yourself.
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HE LIVES
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>>35747
Proof or fuck off.
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>>35791
Check the gaytreon like >>35744 said. He posted an update yesterday. Hopefully he remembers this place and posts here again. https://www.gaytreon.com/posts/some-engine-work-42104686
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>>35795
>paying for the privilege of testing an unfinished game.
>paying to read the 1001 excuses devs shit out every time they can't be fucked to do anything
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>>35795
>www.gaytreon.com refused to connect.
huehuehue
>>35744
>cucktreon
Here's your problem.
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>>35799
I said check the gaytreon, not give him money. You don't have pay jack shit to see there's been an update.

>>35805
Been a problem with this dev since the beginning. Have you read this thread?
>>35799
You don't need to pay to play/test the game, you can just go to it to see if there has been a new post or if an update to the game has been posted.
Nothing since the August update. It's been 3 months now.
New Update: https://www.mediafire.com/file/uqrtael7g7491nh/Housesitting_v0.9.0_-_PRE-PATCHED.zip/file

This update focuses on life at home and the reaction to the date; they discuss it with each other, and then life goes on.
The last scene of the day is supposed to convey them somehow growing closer, but simultaneously, having a rift develop in the way they see each other. I hope I managed to do this right; I was quite rusty when writing this scene due to my extended absence, and it took some time to get back into the groove.

I'm pretty happy with how the update turned out, and I didn't edit it as much as I would've liked due to time constraints (it's the weekend now; I plan to get some rest and spend time with friends and family).I would have liked to make an "engine" improvement to change the way the text conversation was rendered between Sarah and the boy, as well as to make the "blue/brown" selection a little better (the link at the footer should only be clickable/visible after you click blue or brown), but I need to think of how to do this, and I don't want to delay getting this update out.
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Thank you for keeping your project alive.
Hmm, why does the default first name of the main character is Ziemowit? It's definitely of Slavic origin, while the rest is more or less international. And it would be nice to have known what the default girl's height is in centimetres, because pretty much everyone outside the US has no idea how it looks using feet and inches.
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>>44079
The game is set in the US, that's why it uses feet and inches (muh immersion). The height... It doesn't really matter. It's just for the user's own mental image.In the PATCHED version of the game, she is about 150cm tall by default, so she's of average height.

The name in the PATCHED version is actually... Just the name of my dog, and it's a name I like. There is no big reason behind it being of Slavic origin. Though you could make a headcanon that they have slavic roots or something, Americans are notoriously concerned with their ancestral roots after all. The normal default name is Jake in the non-PATCHED version, so just a typical "American" name.
I encourage you to just pick a name of your own for the characters, the customization is there for a reason ;)
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>>44081
>Jake
Oh, that's why in her diary it's always
>Jack told me they made up this weekend
despite all that customization?
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>>44082
^ Haha, sorry for that post. Just noticed that my customization has exactly this name.
>>44082
If you prefer, you can edit "preset.js" directly instead of doing the customization through the game - there's way more variables there to play with than in the in-game menu.

If a wrong name shows up, it's possible I messed up the variable - though I don't think I have done so in the Diary (and it seems you found the problem already ^^)
>>44054
I was so fucking sure this was dead, thanks for the update.
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>>44176
I am too delighted.
I had my hopes on this loli incest game that seemed dead but it isn't.
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>>44176
>>44189
I'm like a zombie or the immortal phoenix. I never truly die and come back after some time.
Next update is largely done already, will keep editing it as I have time and post it probably some time next month.
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It's nice that it isn't dead, but the last time I played this it was pretty much a blue balls simulator. Is there any actual sex, penetration or oral yet? If not then I at least know to skip this for now.
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>>44289
Making a game, even a largely text-based one, is a massive pain in the ass, so you have my respect for trying.
>>44365
No, it's still a blue ball simulator (intentionally, some people are into the slow progression). Next month's update will have a handjob scene.
Full on sex will take a bit longer. Oral, I'm not sure of, perhaps a scene with it soon. Not sure yet.
>>44054
Holy fuck, you're alive. Surprised you even remembered this place exists.

>>44365
There's tons of stuff out there that gets right to the point. Let everyone else without shit taste enjoy a slow burn for once instead of complaining about the lack of instant gratification.
Small update v0.9.3: https://www.mediafire.com/file/o1bq51neukg4hyr/Housesitting_v0.9.3_-_PRE-PATCHED.zip/file

Basically no new content in this update (only two scenes), but main thing is the retouched scenes in DAY01 and DAY02.

The worst dialogue that I hated the most was with the coach, Mike, in DAY02. If any anons feels like comparing "DAY02.SCENE03" in old version to new one and giving feedback I'd take it.
In any case, DAY08 will be finished before the end of the month, so that's something to look forward to I guess.
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>>44668
Make sure to make the taboo feeling great.
Don't rush with the sex.
Something like sneaking in her bedroom to use her hand or spy while she's undressing/showering.
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>>44761
I'll definitely try. Sneaking in and molesting her during sleep is probably not going to happen, it doesn't really fit with his character.

On another note, next update is due to be released in a couple of days/next week. Will post it here of course when it's done.
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>>45407
Thanks for your work faggot. I really liked this last time I read it, but I've been having trouble getting in the mood for anything text based lately.
New update: https://www.mediafire.com/file/ci5a3qbvdfzs1aw/Housesitting_v0.9.8_-_PRE-PATCHED.zip/file

It completes the eight day and rewrites quite a few old scenes from the second day, and, the conversation with the mother too.

Let me know how the sex scene with Sarah was, and if there's anything I can improve on for this update. Enjoy!
>>45551
error: no valid storage adapters found.
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>>45583
Seems to be an error with my version of ungoogled chromium. Even older versions of the game I played before are giving this error. Works on tor browser and palememe. However tor browser breaks some icons unfortunately. What's the recommended browser to play this game in?
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>>45551
>She can't drink beer because she's not 21
The recommended age of the MC is 17. Depending on the age you choose, these repeated lines on day 1 about her not being 21 to drink yet don't make much sense as you're drinking underage right in front of her. I suggest you add a check for the age you set the MC to and make revised lines appear if his age is set to less than 21. I don't know how I missed this all the times I read through the game ages ago now.
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>>45586
No clue, it works on Firefox / Chrome / Edge / Anything else I've tried. It doesn't require an internet connection to play, so just play it on a disconnected VM if you're paranoid.

>>45588
Right. I'll just turn it into her being too young, then everyone can draw their own conclusions about her age. (Unless they're retards that make her a granny.)
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>>45597
>I'll just turn it into her being too young, then everyone can draw their own conclusions about her age.
That part of it already worked. The issue is the hypocrisy of the brother saying she's can't when he's also too young. This is set in America right? Or was the setting in some non-defined country? It's been a while, so forget. I think other places have lower drinking ages. You could just set the age of alcohol legality to 16 or 17 in their unspecified country.
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>>45602
It's set in the US yes, but difference between 17 year old having a beer and a 13 year old is still quite big. (Plus, he does care about her a lot, so it's a kind of a 'parental instinct'/responsibility as well, if you will.)
I'm European, so teenage drinking might be a bit too normal to me. He's not supposed to be a regular drinker, just a teenager taking advantage of circumstances to drink some beer.
So yes, while there's some hypocrisy there, I hope it's not too obvious when I turn it into "she's too young to drink", meaning he internally believes it's okay for him as a 17 year old to drink a beer.
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>>45551
>Day 02 - Saturday, 12:35. Changing Room.DAY02.SCENE02.PATH1.PART4
>I stand outside their boot,
"boot" should be "booth".

>>45603
I can understand that it's seen as normal for late teens, even though not legal. I suppose the same holds true in the USA, so you're right. Simply removing the "not 21" part and replacing it with a "too young" ought to work well.
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>>45607
Thanks for catching that typo, it's been fixed now locally for the next update.
And thanks for the feedback on the drinking part, I could probably go back to the scene and rewrite it extensively to improve it some more, but, I don't really feel like it.
Glad to hear that the "too young" at least resolves some of the oddness about the writing, it for sure is better than it used to be (and it required very little effort from the lazy me ^^).

Next update should come out next month, adding the entirety of the ninth day. Thanks for playing/reading the game and your feedback!
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>>45551
>Day 02 - Saturday, 12:57. The Showers. DAY02.SCENE03.PATH1.PART1
>My heart starts beating faster as I recall what her nubile breasts looked like.
This line doesn't make sense if you chose not to peep on Sarah and your sister moments earlier, but still appear regardless of the choice you make even on a fresh run.

>Day 02 - Saturday, 14:15. Changing Rooms. DAY02.SCENE04.PATH1.PART1
>Well, I don't disagree. I doubt I'll forget what I saw either... I look at Sarah, who's standing next to me, at her bikini, and recall what I saw when I peeked through that hole. Wait. Have I just accepted spying on my sister and her friend like it's normal? When did that happen? Shouldn't I feel guilty?
These lines appeared even though I chose not to peep, however I initially chose to peep, then clicked the back arrow and chose not to. If I choose not to peep on a fresh run, the proper lines display.

>Day 02 - Saturday, 15:16. Changing Room. DAY02.SCENE04.PATH1.PART6
>She's my sister's best friend! She's only <<thirteen!
>Day 02 - Saturday, 15:30. On the road. DAY02.SCENE05.PATH1.PART1
>Once again, my sister is hanging over the divider with her back to the windshield to talk with her friend; they talk about their plans for the week, their homework, and my $ girlRel's goals and ambitions.
>Day 02 - Saturday, 15:32. On the road. DAY02.SCENE05.PATH1.PART2
>But she's << toWords('ageDiff') years my junior.
Some code text leaked out. Bold is my own for emphasis.

>Day 02 - Saturday, 15:32. On the road. DAY02.SCENE05.PATH1.PART2
>Think about her? In what way?I'm confused, and answer
There appears to be a missing space between the italicized internal thoughts and the non-italicized narrative description. 

>Day 02 - Saturday, 18:05. The Kitchen. DAY02.SCENE05.PATH1.PART6
>I start by dicing onions finely. I warm the pan, a deep one, pour some olive oil into it, and add some butter.
>When the oil is hot enough, I add the onions. I get the rice ready and measure the amount needed, washing it thoroughly. I stir the onions every now and then, for about five minutes.
>I then add the rice to the pan, baking it for about three minutes, until it is translucent. I add the wine, just enough to cover the rice, and let it boil off. When the wine is all but gone, I add the stock.
>While the stock is simmering, I get started on preparing the piece of fish, a filet of striped bass. Whitefish, in particular, goes well with mushroom risotto. I prepare the mushrooms as well, slicing them evenly.
>And at last, I take the broccoli and prepare it to be cooked. I keep adding stock and stirring the risotto.
>I take out the parmesan cheese and grate some of it.
>When the risotto starts to come together, with about 10 minutes of adding stock and simmering left, I throw the mushrooms into the pan.
>I also warm the skillet, to pan fry the bass. And in another pan, I have water and salt with the broccoli.
>Ten minutes later, dinner is nearly done. To finish off the risotto, I turn off the heat, and add butter and the parmesan cheese, and stir it well.
I know others have spoken to you about this before, but these complete step by step cooking scenes seem like pure filler. I can totally skip them and lose absolutely nothing in regards to tone, plot, or characterization, besides the fact the MC knows how to cook. This one is completely dry, to the point I may as well be reading a manual. If you insist on keeping it, I suggest adding more flavorful descriptors of, at least, the smells MC experiences and their effect on his mood during the preparation of food so there's at least something being added to the tone of the story.

>>45615
If you're looking for more places to post your game for feedback, I might suggest checking out AllTheFallen.moe. I believe they have a subforum dedicated h-games and mods, and as the whole site is dedicated to lolicon and shotacon, you may find some more interest.
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>>45616
Will try to fix these things as soon as possible. I've always wanted to improve the cooking scene, I tried removing it entirely, didn't like removing it (it still shows for example how much effort he puts into cooking for her everyday, which is part of the characterization.) Need to find better way to write them, probably, as you said a lot of people give that feedback and I'm not deaf to it but I have my own personal tastes, as well, of course. And of course, there's also people that tell me they do like it. In general, I suggest just skipping over it for now until I get the time to go back and improve things somehow.

I am aware ATF, but as developer, I would rather not have a presence there. If someone wants to post my game there, or anywhere else, feel free to and I'll probably check in on feedback every now and then.
>>45551
>Day 02 - Saturday, 18:45. The Dining Room. DAY02.SCENE06.PATH1.PART1
>As I'm about to go up, my Julia stops me and tells me
Either remove "my" or replace the variable name with plaintext "sister". Or replace both with plaintext "she", since the sister was referred to in the previous sentence.
>No, of course not, naked.
The placement of the last pause here seems odd to me. I suggest changing it to No, of course, not naked.

>A little higher, just beneath my crotch level, a singular jet facing the door. I frown. Is this...
>I imagine my mother standing in the shower and line the jet up with her figure. It is! I glance at my sister, and wonder if she realizes this jet's purpose. Huh, so much for it being a sin...
Ooh, I don't recall this. Is this new with 9.0 versions? I like it. In fact, I think a bunch of the stuff in the shower scene is different now, as you said you changed a bunch of stuff on day 2. It's hard to notice changes since it's been a very long time since I read it, and while I enjoy it and helping catch errors, I don't have enough time and effort to read old versions over extensively just to catalog changes.

>Day 02 - Saturday, 19:17. The Dining Room. DAY02.SCENE06.PATH1.PART3
>"I'll my hair quick, then get out."
Location description is wrong, they're in the master shower, and the word "wash" is missing from her dialogue here.

>Day 02 - Saturday, 20:40. Living Room. DAY02.SCENE07.PATH1.PART2
>"Boys want good-looing girls.
Typo. "good-looing" to "good-looking".
>they'll realize how stupid they have been.
Suggestion. Change "they have" to "they've". It's more natural for dialogue and he uses a similar contraction seconds before.
>She blushes and looks down and says
Suggestion. Overuse of "and" when listing things off makes it read like a run-on sentence even if it's short. Change "She blushes and looks down and says" to "She blushes, looks down, and says"
>I can't really come out and say what I really think, can I now.
This is a rhetorical question, and should be ended with an interrogative mark, not a period.
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>>45621
>I suggest changing it to No, of course, not naked.
Or alternatively "No, of course not, not naked."
>>45621
Fixed all the things from your previous comment (including the inconsistency with going back to previous choice and variables not being reset) along with another bug that I came across around the same mechanic, thanks for pointing that out.
Will fix the things you pointed out in this comment now, thanks again for the keen-eyed proofreading. 
(It's a bit embarrassing to have introduced this many typos when retouching the old scenes, then again, I did change A LOT of things actually, as long as nothing sticks out as being worse, I'll take it.)
Glad to hear this change of the shower scene stuck out though, I think the new version is better as well.

>Overuse of "and" when listing things off makes it read like a run-on sentence even if it's short.
Yep, this is something I struggle with in general. Thanks again for all the corrections.
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>>45624
I'm just catching things as I go, no dedicated proof reading. That's the beauty of making your work public. Done reading day 2 now, so I probably won't catch as much until I hit the newer content around day 7+. I forgot how packed with lewdness the first two days were.

>>45551
>Day 02 - Saturday, 20:43. Living Room. DAY02.SCENE07.PATH1.PART3
>I pause and look at smiling happily.
Typo. Missing the word "her", I believe.
>I want to cheer you on as you siwm
Typo. "siwm" -> "swim"
>"No! No way! If that's what you're mean
Typo. "you're" -> "you"
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>>45625
Everything you pointed out should be fixed now. 

And yes, it struck me too that DAY01 and DAY02 are a bit... different from the others. I was still quite new to writing when I wrote them, it might be due to that. 
As a justification, I'll just say that they're so action packed to allow the protagonist to "awaken" his desires towards the girl ^^ Afterwards, he is aware of it, and needs to deal with it, leading to a bit different pacing.

Hope you'll enjoy the new content as well, thanks for playing the game again.
If you find errors in the new content, let me know. I might do a small update in one or two weeks, where I rewrite some old scenes I'm not happy with and add two new scenes.
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>>45626
>that DAY01 and DAY02 are a bit... different
There is some merit to it. Having a lewd chunk at the beginning gets readers hooked first before it slows down. Through day 3.

>>45551
>Day 03 - Sunday, 09:43. Dad's Office. DAY03.SCENE01.PATH1.PART2
>so it's more efficient for us to have her practice her here.
Typo. Either a word, such as "swimming" is missing, or the word "her" needs to be removed.

>Day 03 - Sunday, 14:13. The Backyard.DAY03.SCENE03.PATH1.PART2
>"I was. She really likes you, but she doesn't have the courage to tell you about it."
Suggestion. Given Sarah's actions the previous day where she basically seduced the MC, I feel he might have a bit of internal monologue on his sister saying Sarah's doesn't have enough "courage" to tell him she likes him.

>Day 03 - Sunday, 15:33. Hallway.DAY03.SCENE04.PATH1.PART2
>She slowly starting moving the finger in and out of herself, enjoying her own tightness.
Grammar error. "moving" -> "to move"

>Day 03 - Sunday, 17:53. Living Room.DAY03.SCENE05.PATH1.PART3
>Parmesan
Here you capitalized Parmesan, but not the previous day when cooking dinner. Spellcheck says it should be capitalized, but I couldn't really care less so long as it's consistent.

Day 03 - Sunday, 21:36. My Room.DAY03.SCENE06.PATH1.PART2
>I'm a goddamn hypocrite.
I mentioned this over a year ago >>10625 , but this line doesn't make sense if you didn't peep the other day, and I chose not to on a fresh run. You said you'd add a check, so I'm reminding you if it's not on your to-do-list.
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>>45632
Fixing this all. 
>Suggestion. Given Sarah's actions the previous day where she basically seduced the MC, I feel he might have a bit of internal monologue on his sister saying Sarah's doesn't have enough "courage" to tell him she likes him.
Yes, true, that's a good suggestion. Will implement it.

Also, I added a check... but during shuffling shit around, I fucked up the variable it checks for :D Thanks for catching it again, my bad.
Through Day 4.

>>24979
>Latest version gives the error "No valid storage adapters found" in Ungoogled Chromium. Works fine on Palememe though.
Oh, looks like I've had this error nearly a year now, back since version 8.4.

>>45551
On Monday they eat twice in the morning. Once immediately after getting up, and again right before leaving for school. Is intentional?
>Day 04 - Monday, 05:44. The Kitchen.DAY04.SCENE01.PATH1.PART2
>She nods, let's go of me, and rolls off the bed.
Typo. "let's" -> "lets"

>Day 04 - Monday, 12:57. The School.DAY04.SCENE02.PATH1.PART3
>He clucks his tongue
Typo? I've not heard of anyone clucking their tongue, but it might be an acceptable variant of clicking one's tongue that I've just never seen. I mentioned this about a year ago, but received no comment. This time I'm properly pointing to the location of each typo, so I hope that makes things easier for you.

>Day 04 - Monday, 18:07. Hallway.DAY04.SCENE03.PATH1.PART4
>We open the it and take out the suitcases.
Typo. Remove the first "the".

>Day 04 - Monday, 19:39. Your Room.DAY04.SCENE04.PATH1.PART1
>"Smell's good. I'm so hungry."
Typo. "Smell's" -> "Smells"

>Day 04 - Monday, 22:24. The Sunroom.DAY04.SCENE05.PATH1.PART6
>and isn't sacrifice supposed to be part of $womanHood?
Code leak. Or maybe just a weird typo? No idea why'd you'd have a variable there instead of just "motherhood" or something.

>Day 04 - Monday, 23:02. Your Room.DAY04.SCENE06.PATH1.PART3
>I can hear my beating in my chest
Typo. Missing the word "heart".
>>45637
>Is intentional?
Is this* intentional?
>>45637
>Oh, looks like I've had this error nearly a year now, back since version 8.4.
I'm not a developer of any kind, so have no clue what could cause this. Sorry that it is happening.

>On Monday they eat twice in the morning. Once immediately after getting up, and again right before leaving for school. Is intentional?
Yes, this is intentional. Early on in the morning it's full breakfast, later, to refuel for school just something small as far as I can remember.
I'm a fucking autist when it comes to shit like this, and researched quite extensively and drew up actual schedules ( https://pastebin.com/xjhrBFpA ).

Fixing all the typos and code leak now. It's supposed to say "motherhood" indeed. Not sure why it's leaking right now but will look into it.
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>>45637
>Typo? I've not heard of anyone clucking their tongue, but it might be an acceptable variant of clicking one's tongue that I've just never seen. I mentioned this about a year ago, but received no comment. This time I'm properly pointing to the location of each typo, so I hope that makes things easier for you.
https://dictionary.cambridge.org/dictionary/english/clucking
As far as I understand, clucking is clicking tongue, but specifically, in a disapproving manner (hence me using it here rather than the more "generic" clicking).
>>45640
Fixed all these issues now, will be heading to bed and check any problems tomorrow when I have time.
Thanks for all the corrections once again.
>>45640
>I'm a fucking autist when it comes to shit like this, and researched quite extensively and drew up actual schedules
I always thought as much, and it really helps fill things out and add realism. Speaking of, I sometimes think the way the sister talks seems a bit too technical or adult, but at the same time these are rich kids with fancy educations and I know teens her age say odd shit all the time because they're still a bit socially awkward and figuring higher level socialization out, on top of her saying she's only really good friends with Sarah adding to her potential social awkwardness. It's a tough call to make deciding whether something she says sounds too unnatural, so I won't give much criticism in that area. And to further my tangent, her only being friends with Sarah increasing the potential for social awkwardness helps justify further reliance on her brother and her lack of understanding social norms that help result in the awkward and lewd situations like showering together and admitting to masturbating unnecessarily. You've done, in my eyes, a pretty decent job of making these unlikely situations believable without needing too immense a suspension of disbelief.
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>>45644
The being unpopular/only friends with Sarah is an addition I made in v0.9.x, glad to see it's having the intended effect.
And yes, the dialogue is hard, I'm trying to make her sound not too mature, but, as a grown male writing it, it's hard.
If you have any specific feedback on that point where a certain line if dialogue just feels wrong, let me know, and I'll think about that line to improve it.
Plan is to do a retouching pass through content of DAY03 and DAY04 some time in the near future, where stuff like this will be caught by myself as well (hopefully).
>>45551
>Tuesday, May 02 Diary
>Mike
I thought she was training with Paul in the mornings now?
>Day 06 - Wednesday
>Click the smaller back arrows
>It's still Day 06 - Wednesday, but I'm in the events for the latter parts of Day 04 - Monday
Not sure why this happens, but it can be reset by progressing forward again.

Initially when the MC is finding reasons not to date Sarah to tell his sister, and he brings up how she's so much younger than him, given their suggested ages 13/17 I thought maybe there might also be legal concerns, and significant resistance from the parents, but I forgot they pretty much fully consent to, and the mother even encourages the relationship, on date night, Day 06 - Wednesday. I suppose I may be overthinking it. It's not that huge a deal, and if there were ever legal concerns they'd probably get a close in age exemption according to Romeo and Juliet laws. That's of course, only if someone complains to the cops about their relationship in the first place. Still though, her mother seems quite eager to push her barely-into-puberty daughter into the arms of a completely-or-nearly-done-with-puberty adolescent on the verge of legal adulthood. Perhaps there's the implication that MC's family is richer than Sarah's giving the mother further motive to be eager? Perhaps the relationship isn't as abnormal as I feel it is and my views have been distorted by adulthood and pedo hysteria? I recall a highschool girl I knew dating a late 20s man with the full consent of her military family.

>Day 06 - Wednesday, 17:55. On the road.DAY06.SCENE03.PATH1.PART1
>Shit, relax./ Feeling
Typo. Remove "/"

>Day 06 - Wednesday, 20:50. Garage.DAY06.SCENE04.PATH1.PART1
>Emojis
I realize it makes sense and all, but I beg of you to refrain. At the very least, understand the effect it has on the tone. Starting here I've begun reaching new content beyond the last time I read a year and some months ago.

>Day 06 - Wednesday, 21:13. My Room.DAY06.SCENE04.PATH1.PART2
>I look at the picture she send me and smile happily.
Typo. "send" -> "sent"

>Day 06 - Wednesday, 22:22. Hallway.DAY06.SCENE06.PATH1.PART2
>I glance down at the floor and see her pants and bra lying beside the chair. She took her bra off as well?
I'm confused here too. He makes no mention of whether she still has her crop top on, nor that he sees it on the floor or not, nor that the towel is covering her top half as well or not. Is this meant to imply she took off her bra without taking her crop top off? Or that she took both off and then put her crop top back on again, for comfort while lying down? I'm going to go with that last guess for now.
>Day 06 - Wednesday, 22:28. Hallway.DAY06.SCENE06.PATH1.PART3
>she turns to her side, just enough to sit up and turn her head my way, without showing me her bare chest
Well this answers my previous question, she was entirely nude save for the towel on her butt. When you mention her bra, are you referring to the crop top? I don't think that counts as a bra, and I feel like there ought to be at least some mention of how her bare back is visible once the MC notices her clothes on the floor, if not a more pronounced reaction to her total nudity save for a towel, as in earlier scenes.

>Day 06 - Wednesday, 22:35. Hallway.DAY06.SCENE06.PATH1.PART4
>I clear my and move my hands towards her ankles
Typo. Missing a word, "mind" or "head" or "thoughts" or somesuch.
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>>45661
>I thought she was training with Paul in the mornings now?
I think I had Mike training her Tue, Thu, Fri in the morning, but I could have messed up. As far as I recall, he asks Paul to come by on the morning on Monday for the "trial". Off-screen, they'd talk and come to final arrangement on how to proceed (Paul in mornings, Mike doing 3 sessions at end of day). Might need to mention this/explain, but I don't think most people are going to care. Perhaps I will integrate it into internal thought in some scene to show what happened for the autists among the readers.

>Not sure why this happens, but it can be reset by progressing forward again.
Huh, no clue, will try to look into it. Possibly related to Diary which isn't the cleanest system (kind of want to rework it, but it's not something I enjoy too much so have been putting it off).

>Initially when the MC is finding reasons not to date Sarah...
Sarah is a little older in my head than Julia, a few months away from turning 14, so the age gap isn't THAT big.
As you said, legal wise, it could be a problem, but as far as I know nobody is going to care if the parents don't report it.
As for the mother, she's not really motivated by money. She's supposed to be kind of a "hippie" and have a very good relationship with her daughter, hence she knows that it's the daughter pursuing him, and that there wasn't any kind of grooming/coercion going on which would be primary concern.
He's also a long-term friend of Sarah, and he's known to be very responsible / respectable / caring, which is main reason the dad reluctantly permits it (and also because Mother supports it).
Not sure how taboo it is in the US, I assume more so than where I am from, but having 13-14 year old girls date high school seniors that are 16-18 was nothing special and was done openly (which is the main cause of the plot hole I suppose, I just didn't take it into account enough). 
Sarah also just looks more mature than Julia, so that helps in regards to general public perception/getting cops called.

>I realize it makes sense and all, but I beg of you to refrain...
I fucking hate Emojis, but I wasn't sure how to get around it. It took me forever to get my own girlfriend to not use Emojis with me, and when I text younger family members, there's several of them in every text message.
I'm kind of like old guy shouting at cloud I guess and have no clue why everyone uses so many of them nowadays. Main concern with removing them is that it'd look odd to anyone that regularly interacts with teenagers, and that the text "dialogue" should read significantly different from spoken. I'll think about it though, because as I said, I hate them too and I included them reluctantly.

>I'm confused here too...
Fair points, I messed up here, lost track of the logistics. I'll need to reread the scene and I'll fix things up in some way that it makes sense.
(Probably by having him notice the bare back instead of looking at clothes on floor, and having stronger reaction as you pointed out.)

Will fix the rest of the typos, thanks again.
>>45551
>Thursday, May 04 Diary
>Anyway, he then started massaging my lower back
Suggestion. "he then" -> "then he"

>Day 08 - Friday, 12:09. School Canteen.DAY08.SCENE01.PATH1.PART2
>"Didn't you just say that I should eat pizza?" At least, that's what I heard."
Typo. Remove the quotation marks in the middle.

>Day 08 - Friday, 19:48. The Kitchen.DAY08.SCENE02.PATH1.PART2
>saute it
Typo. "saute" -> "sauté"

END OF CONTENT
Bretty gud. Fairly obvious the sister saw Sarah and MC up to no good from the bathroom door. Can't wait to read about it in the next diary entry. I know I said earlier how the first few days were really packed with lewdness, but really, there's a lot over all. Fuck the niggers complaining about there not being hardcore sex right off the bat. A lot has happened in just a week. I didn't expect Sarah to move so fast, but really, based on the swimsuit teasing, she was ready to go wild from the first.
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Since the story has gone into a similar direction, I'd like to recommend anons this pair of h-manga featuring a trio of characters in somewhat different circumstances and relations.
[Sabaku] Imouto no Tomodachi no Sekirei-chan | My Sister's Friend, Sekirei-chan (COMIC LO 2020-03) [English] [Nishimaru] [Digital]
https://exhentai.org/g/1579813/e475663df5/
[Sabaku] Imouto no Tomodachi Homecoming | My Little Sister's Friend Homecoming (COMIC LO 2022-01) [English] [TheBestCupcake] [Digital]
https://exhentai.org/g/2142875/dfa5dca50a/
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>>45670
Thanks for the corrections, and yes, I try to make sure every update has at least one lewd scene. It is a h-game, after all even though I'm trying to tell a story at the same time.
Glad to hear you liked the new content, and yes, the pace with Sarah was a concern for me. But I also wanted to have two different personalities, and based on Sarah's personality, I don't think it's TOO fast.

As for the spying... yes, she definitely noticed something was happening, but I have not made my mind up 100% yet about how much exactly or what exactly she saw, need to keep thinking about this.

>>45673
I've read the first one in the past, never knew it got a sequel. Thanks for the share.
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>>45675
Sequel just got translated. Got full marks from me, which is rare.
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>>45676
I always thought the boys were supposed to be dense ones, I guess the sister also suffers from this syndrome ^^ I love Sekirei's design, was a nice read.
barebones dogshit
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>>46339
U a faggie
So, how much of the game is done since pre-bunker?
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>>46388
Not enough sister pussy.
>>45551
Since you've made many edits/fixes since 0.9.8, could you make a 0.9.9 release?
Guess who's still alive... if barely. Any way, here is the next update. I'm not 100% happy with it, but I just can't improve it right now. Been working way too many hours, with just Sundays off, leaving me dead tired and with zero time or energy for my hobbies.

Anyway, here is the update, hopefully it's somewhat enjoyable. https://www.mediafire.com/file/r64u3o5d06mzglf/Housesitting_v0.10.0_-_PRE-PATCHED.zip/file
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Haliluya, you're alive! Time to replay the entire game because I forgot where I stopped or where I even put this game.

four-and-three-quarter foot tall is about 4'7 foot tall and is about 140 cm
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>>53511
Probably, you stopped around day 08. If you enjoyed the game though and have forgotten most of it, could be enjoyable to play it again (some changes were made to old scene, but nothing major).

The update isn't as well tested as it should be, hopefully no game breaking bugs. I did change a lot of code in the background to fix a bit of older bugs, and add some new functionality.

The length of the girl was changed a bit - in her intended age and build, she's a bit shorter now due to delayed puberty which will become a plot point. 

This update should also (unless I fucked up the variables/coding) have different dialogue for "puberty state" of your selected stats at the start of the game, the most care is given to the intended stats as explained in the settings screen.

Anyway, let me know any feedback you have, can't promise I'll be quick to fix it, but I'll revisit the thread next I work on it.
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>>53512
very minor bugfix: https://www.mediafire.com/file/qm2lj3duunv557p/Housesitting_v0.10.0fixed.zip/file

due to underlying changes to how stuff was "rendered", caused issue on days06.scene06, now fixed.
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Having your own car at 17, impressive.

>Give in and let her have a sip[1]
I remember having an option to refuse before.

Imagine her getting into olimpics, and then being beat by some tranny macho that claims to be female.
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>>53515
Well, he has a driver's license. I think most states allow this by 17? If not, you can age him up by a year, and it should be fine.

I'll look into that, possibly a bug due to underlying code changes.
Tried >>53514 , it shows this at the start, but nowhere else. Probably not lethal.
Error: <<set>>: bad evaluation: State.variables.Points is undefined
<<set $Points['Sarah'] = 0>>
Error: <<set>>: bad evaluation: State.variables.Points is undefined
<<set $Points['PCStern'] = 0>>
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>>53519
yeah, this is unrelated and harmless - these variables are initialized in the settings page. I'll fix it, though, just to get rid of the errors that shouldn't be there in the first place.

I know what caused the secondary options to disappear, however, I'm not sure why it's causing it - I will need to debug it a bit to figure out. The game should be playable though, even though it's not ideal.
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>>53520
Managed to find a solution for the issue: https://www.mediafire.com/file/r64u3o5d06mzglf/Housesitting_v0.10.0_-_PRE-PATCHED.zip/file

Not entirely sure how I caused the bug, but think when rewriting a section of the code, I changed the order in which things were processed/rendered slightly, leading to this bug. Played around with it, and managed to find a fix.
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>>53524 and >>53509 have exactly the same mediafire link, with probably same file. The "I remember having an option to refuse before" bug is still there.

I'd prefer for you to tripfag.
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>>53525
I'm running on fumes, sorry. Pulled an all-nighter to finish the editing, and I fucked up the link.
Now finally, it should be working for real. Otherwise, I don't know anymore.

https://www.mediafire.com/file/g0b8don1kiaepgo/Housesitting_v0.10.0fixed3_-_PRE-PATCHED.zip/file
It works, otsukaresama. Please have sleep, lack of sleep destroys brain faster than alcohol. Probably.
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premise of this game reminded me of
[Okada Kou] Oya no Inuma no Sentaku | While our parents are away (Shishunki no Kokoro) [English] [Rabu2]
[岡田コウ] 親の居ぬまの選択 (思春期のココロ) [英訳]

and of other 2000 incest manga works

...I will never understand how it feels to fuck my sister. So many lost opportunities.
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<Planned to write down all typos I noticed, but I haven't found much. So, have this piece of reaction instead.

The world spins around my head as I stumble out of my room. But, am I not a danger to her myself? The way I've been feeling, and acting the past few days, aren't I the most dangerous of all?

No! I shake my head firmly. That can't be true. I'd never hurt her, I love her, I love her more than anything in the world. I try to convince myself, but my hands are shaking. I would never, not ever, do anything to hurt her.

<he's cute

I continue driving towards the school, the conversation now falling quiet. I look at my sister and say, "Jules, I've been thinking. I do want to ask Sarah out"—she's looking at me now—"but, with all her friends around, it's a little embarrassing. Could you maybe ask her, if she wants to eat lunch with you?"

<not sure if a good move. She'll get mad when she learns that she's just a replacement for his sis. Though, maybe it is a good move.

My heart is pounding in my chest as I make a smoothie for her.

<lol. Just sounds fun out of context.

She wants to be involved? After all this time, she wants to just... swoop in, and fix things? I feel my ears pound as my nostrils flare. No way! I try to control the pure unadulterated rage consuming me and not show it on my face. No way in hell—

<my money whoring self doesn't understand the importance of attention. I think money >>>>>>>>> attention.

"Divorced‽" she looks as if struck, then slumps into her chair. "Divorced..."

<‽ again. It's probably twine or sugarcube being a smartass.

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"That bastard, I can't believe he cheated on you."

<what a stud, the dad.
<remembered how somebody heard from his girlfriend "I wouldn't respect you as a man if you wouldn't cheat on me".
<i wonder if it turns out later that I'm not mom's son, and we aren't related by blood with her
<and that my sister is my half sister
<what if I'm adopted or something

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"See? He agrees as well. So what do you like the most about her? Her face, hair, or her legs? They're nice, right? Or maybe her ass—"

<mom is quite a thing too, eh

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While I continue driving towards the restaurant, I sneak a peek at her in the rearview mirror and see that her breathing is still labored from excitement and that she's smiling slightly. She's enjoying herself, that's a good start. I feel more confident and relax a little. It doesn't take long before we reach our destination.

<driving with little girls is more dangerous than driving full of alcohol, confirmed

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Am I misunderstanding something? Was I that harsh? I think back to the conversation and frown. I really wasn't. Where's this reaction coming from?

<oh i wonder :lenny:

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I look at my sister and see her start to blush. She continues devouring the food rapidly.

<cute

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I feel tears well up in my eyes as I read the question. I put the essay back down, crouch down next to her, and ask, "Jules, do you really feel this way?"

<huh, how rare, same. The tears thing.

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"Wait, I don't want to come in the water."

<lawful good

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We continue on our way home, the atmosphere somewhat awkward. I can't tell her the truth, but lying to her like this, doesn't feel good either. I sigh and focus on driving.

END OF CONTENT

<that was quick
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Sports carieer isn't something I see rich people do. It's easier for me to see poor people throw themselves into that, because they have no perspectives in life overwise. Sports is a competition of governments, governments should be ones throwing money at it. Also sports is just a spectacle for lazy observers.

I remembered that drawing of brazillian kid standing amid ruins looking at football field somewhere amid clowds. Also the sportish girl in Baldr Sky was the poorest as well, her parents made shitton of kids without giving a fuck, those lucky bastards.

There is also this thing, excercise is good for your body, but sport destroys it. Professional sports men have lots of health issues by the age of 30. Nobody really talks about it, sportsmen, just like soldiers, are walking human sacrifices, you wouldn't bring attention to that unless you want to take their place in the oven.

I thought about complaining how every little action he does gets shown, but it has a potential of pleasantly surprising me later. I've seen people predicting that some detail is more important than another detail simply due to some detail being described in great detail out of nowhere, so if every detail gets described equally well, it might hide this.

I haven't seen many choices past day 3, and I'm worried that bug is there again. Last time I played I stopped at day 3.

You probably can ask local furry mod to edit latest version in the op post, or you can make a tiny neocities page and ask furry mod to add that in the op post. I'd also prefer you to tripfag, at least when you release something, I was wondering if some rando was fucking with me by uploading an older version as a newer one, also that would make ctrl-f for releases easier.

Pretty good work overall. Very short though. Or, maybe it's actually long, but I read giant vns, so it does feel short in comparison. I probably killed 2-3 hours on this. I wonder how many years it will take to get this game to completion.
Found a couple of typos in the new content.
>DAY09.SCENE02.PATH1.PART3
<Mike goes back to coaching and corrects my girlRel's and her teammates' mistakes every now and then.
>DAY09.SCENE03.PATH1.PART1
<I shake my head, "Not really. I haven't looked too much in it."
(Should be "into it".
>>53509
>Guess who's still alive...
Subarashi.
>>53515
>Having your own car at 17, impressive.
His parents are upper middle class. That's key to the story.
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>>54220
having a car by 17 is still small family middle class, not really upper. Beater cars are 5-10k and will last 100k+ miles if you're able to shop around
>>53668
I thought it would be a giant wall of typos knowing you, but glad to see it's just your reactions ;D 
Thanks a lot for checking it out once again, and I laughed at a couple of your quotes, nice to see that the way I wrote those interactions is arriving correctly.

>huh, how rare, same. The tears thing.
Is this meant sarcastic, or do you mean that it was an emotional moment? I wasn't too sure on that scene, it's hard to make a section about a homework essay somewhat interesting  ^^ Though I do admit I actually cried in real life when writing it (call me pussy if you want, I just get quite immersed when writing this shit), but not sure the delivery in the text is quite there yet.

>Sports carieer isn't something I see rich people do. It's easier for me to see poor people throw themselves into that, because they have no perspectives in life overwise. Sports is a competition of governments, governments should be ones throwing money at it. Also sports is just a spectacle for lazy observers.
Yep, I know - though I tried to explain it in a way that it was mostly an "accident" that she got so involved in the swimming (where it basically started because she won a medal, and liked the positive attention she got from parents), rather than some financial motive (though, now in the story, it is important to her to be financially independent and successful - this will be a plot point in the next update).

>There is also this thing, excercise is good for your body, but sport destroys it. Professional sports men have lots of health issues by the age of 30. Nobody really talks about it, sportsmen, just like soldiers, are walking human sacrifices, you wouldn't bring attention to that unless you want to take their place in the oven.

Yep, very true, but I believe swimming isn't as bad as you as many other sports (but of course not ideal - for example, I've already written small section that was supposed to be included in latest update on delayed puberty that she is experiencing).

>I haven't seen many choices past day 3, and I'm worried that bug is there again. Last time I played I stopped at day 3.

The bug isn't back, but you're right there's not so many choices - apart from the real choices between Sarah / Julia that are happening (and will happen in next two updates to decide if you get Sarah ending or not).
The choices in the early part were mostly a result of me trying to get the engine to allow for them, but due to very slow development pace already, I'm right now just trying to finish at least the main story (as well as the Sarah ending).

I thought about complaining how every little action he does gets shown, but it has a potential of pleasantly surprising me later. I've seen people predicting that some detail is more important than another detail simply due to some detail being described in great detail out of nowhere, so if every detail gets described equally well, it might hide this.
It's just my writing style I guess. I've experimented with shortening things, but, I just keep ending up with "too many" details. I hope at least when reading it, it isn't too bothersome (or takes you out of the flow).
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>>54454
>Pretty good work overall. Very short though. Or, maybe it's actually long, but I read giant vns, so it does feel short in comparison. I probably killed 2-3 hours on this. I wonder how many years it will take to get this game to completion.
I understand the frustration, though, I'd say a couple hours of content isn't awful. Right now it's about 80000words (including code), which depending on reading speed is like 2-5 hours of content. I'd also like to think it's pretty high quality content, at least.
Sadly, you're right, progress is slow. But I hope I have at least shown to be working on it consistently, even if I don't have a lot of time to work on it. It really is a passion project, and I don't plan to abandon it, so it'll be finished at some point (unless I pull a Miura).

>You probably can ask local furry mod to edit latest version in the op post, or you can make a tiny neocities page and ask furry mod to add that in the op post. I'd also prefer you to tripfag.
I can give that a try indeed to get the OP updated, I'll make a post in the meta thread to see if it's possible. As for tripfagging, I'm not a fan of it, but I'll consider it.

>Found a couple of typos in the new content.
Thanks for that, fixing them this weekend when I work on the next scene.

I'll post unofficial update here that includes Diary scene that was posted on the Developer' Gaytreon as well as dynamic text (based on character customization) "the modder" wrote for in the last scene of the update (where delayed puberty is mentioned, which also explains her short height and lack of "development" at default settings).
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I'll post unofficial update here that includes Diary scene that was posted on the Gaytreon as well as dynamic text (based on character customization) "the modder" wrote for in the last scene of the update (where delayed puberty is mentioned, which also explains her short height and lack of "development" at default settings).

link: https://www.mediafire.com/file/507aeta91yez07g/Housesitting_v0.10.1_-_PRE-PATCHED.zip/file

Didn't include these customization based dialogues in the last update because I wasn't sure of them yet, but guess I can post them here and see if you have any feedback on them/the diary scene included in this update (along with some more bugfixes and typos).

Especially the last one I'm unsure of, since it's quite a bit of text. It does explain some oddities in regards to her height and still being flatchested in the default settings, and it is a realistic consequence of competitive sports.
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>>54455
>>54458
You managed to have someone try to impersonate you on here of all places?
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>>54459
It's the real me, just using tripfag as user requested in this thread to prevent any confusion (though as you said, I doubt anyone would ever bother impersonating me).
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>>54460
Confusion?
The only time when it matters who you are is when you explicitly talk about development.
You'd have to try to make that complicated.
I am a true idiot. Deleting the preset.js files seems to do nothing to un-normalfag the game. How do I achieve the good content on the most recent version?
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can you fuck sister yet
>>55354
If you have the preset.js file you should be good. In the settings screen there should be a box with some recommended customization in regards to ages. If she's your sister, the preset.js is working.
In future update, the chosen age and body will lead to some unique dialogue in a few specific spots (main reason I reworked age to take actual int rather than just text).
This story is pretty lame. Yeah, I wouldn't consider it a game.
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>>54454
>Is this meant sarcastic, or do you mean that it was an emotional moment?
No sarcasm there. Sorry for a slow reply, I don't know when to shut up, so local furry faggot mod rangebanned half of my city at some point.
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I was really digging the story months ago, but I don't have time to play it. Keep it up, you're doing God's work.
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>>54458
>swimming can make you have flat chest
uh sauce?
might have to make my future daughter become a swimmer so she can remain perfect forever
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>>56914
Swimmer women.
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>>56914
people have to grow up eventually...
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>>56941
Not if you kill them
I happened to have just watched a french movie about a necrophile that develops a romantic relationship with a little girl.
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Preg content when?
>>54458
Its pretty good. I like the chars, though the writing can get a bit autisimo with the cooking and swimming dynamics. 

I would like a bit more choice though. Small things that are called back to in a chapter are fine but I would like to be able to not date Sarah. I know the main char hasn't gone full incest yet, but having him say something along the lines of: 

"I have a lot on my plate right now managing my sister's career as well as my own school, it wouldn't be fair to Sarah to enter a relationship that I couldn't fully commit to."
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I prefer this thing getting finished at some point over it having more choices.
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>>56934
I'd believe that claim if I had seen her adult female relatives with significantly bigger bust. And it's a public secret that getting doped with androgen analogues can have bad effects on sexual development.
>>55661
That's fine, thanks for checking it out. "Kinetic novel" would perhaps be a more apt description (though that generally refers to VNs).
>>56305
Glad to hear it had the intended effect and I wasn't the only one reacting to the scene that way.
>>56312
Thanks, progress is slow, but I am working on it. Making decent progress towards the next update.
>>56914
It's pretty common in competitive athletes in general, some sports more than others. 
Overall swimming is not as extreme as in dancing or gymnastics, but there is a statistical link towards delayed menarche in competitive swimmers, which scales with the intensity and how early they started.
https://pubmed.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/7673417/
https://pubmed.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/6513771/
https://europepmc.org/article/MED/6607897
>>57270
I have very little free time in general and progress/updates are slow, I'm focusing on advancing the story rather than giving players choice.
As for Sarah, pretty soon her story will reach the point where you have to choose between her and Julia. 
The current relationship/development between them is not going to be optional because it's a plot device to advance the relationship between the boy and Julia in the next two updates.
>>57274
I'm trying... I have finished editing the next two scenes, and finished most of the editing of the third scene, and I'm working on the writing of the fourth scene (but this one is hard and long, and might take some more time).
>Patreon
So, what got gutted and changed from the premise as a result of it?
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>>58058
Nothing, the game has always from the very start relied on using a patch for all taboo content (can be seen in OP of the thread). Only change has been that the patch has become entirely external (preset.js file) rather than a toggle on the start screen, which also means that as long as you download the pre-patched version the patch is applied automatically.
so is this dead or what?
I don't know what the patreon is called
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>>60156
Last update was February
Patreon acc is called 'i107760' and game name was changed to 'Housesitting;
>>60156
I'm alive, sort of. Next update in ??? time, hopefully not too much longer. Mostly just editing left to do now but I haven't had a lot of time to spend on it due to working 60-70 hours per week and just being very burned out.
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>>62396
Apparently, World Swim Day is celebrated on the last Saturday of every October. That is, today.
So, any ETA on that update? Preferably a little more specific than "???".
>>62396
>>62396
i feel so creepy playing this game (in a bad way) and getting hard while some girl sits on my lap while i'm suppose to be helping her with math homework, like i'm taking advantage of someone.
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>>62396
>not too much longer
come back
>>65588
hawt
>>56947
what movie
I was waiting for this one to be finished before playing it, but I think I'll have to just play whatever was left before OP died
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>>71372
Yeah I'm in the same boat. Its a shame porn game devs make something great and then just fucking disappear without finishing it.
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>>8273 (OP) 
OP WHERE ARE YOU
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>>72010

Prison if I had to guess.
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