>>2931
Sorry. I have to focus on my finals for the next few weeks, but it's coming along nicely.
Though, I am experiencing difficulties in some pieces of dialogue where I have internal conflict on whether/how I have to change them.
For example:
In page 11, Neptune is supposed to be praising Nepgear that she is the first person that always has her back.
But at the same time, that compliment itself harbors no feat considering that everyone else is dead.
By that point, it also makes her feel lonely that her sister is the only one she could count on. Maybe lonelier than Noire, if anything.
And because of that, it's pretty hard to fit it in one dialogue box. Specifically, the third dialogue of Neptune in the middle panel.
I've been scratching my head on how I can mix the two translations I received, and make it sound reasonable enough.
The two versions of the translated lines:
>Ahh, saying that makes me feel somewhat lonely!
>Weird, I am feeling lonelier as I speak!
Compared to my rewrites:
>But since we're the only ones left, that's a pretty depressing thought!
Or…
>But saying that felt like such a waste when we're the only ones left!
I'll try and see what the people here might think the best approach would be in the meantime.